I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The imagery and bright adjectives made me smile because this is probably one of the nicest poems I've read. It also seems very personal, which makes the reader feel happy to read because it gives an intimate insight of the author. The emotions feel raw, and the way you describe them makes the reader feel them too.
I especially liked the 3rd stanza because the imagery is probably strongest here. We can all see the sun, wind, flowers, and almost pastel-like or pure scenery. The lines are creative and powerful. The rest of the poem goes on as a self-reflection, and it's easy to follow and understand.
The only suggestion I can come up with is to essentially "show" us a bit more than "tell". This is a small suggestion because you do a great job in imagery, but if you want to, you could add a bit more. For example, add senses. There are great descriptions for touch and sight (and a bit for hearing) for the 3rd stanza, but if you could add smell, then that would just strength that part. After the 3rd, you do shift a bit more towards "telling", but it's beautiful as it is as well.
I really love this poem, and I hope you keep up the amazing work! <3
Points: 433
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