I am not a bouquet
of flowers from the nearest grocery store my petals
Weak and wilting
For you to pick and pluck at
I am ivy growing green on the side of red bricks
my leaves venomous
A promise that your touch will leave you with a wound
A reminder to
Keep your hands to yourself!
amother will scold her child
Did she ever remind you?
Did I provoke you?
or did you forget that I am not an
Ocean
Blue and deep
waves enveloping your toes at the shore
Inviting you inside
to search and explore, to steal sea shells
and rip up kelp from your tread
Instead I am the sun you are escaping
My laugh loud and hearty
rays burning the tip of your nose
pink and swollen, burning
I am not
I am not
I am not
I am warm
sandalwood soap
soft skin against white linen sheets
small stains go unnoticed
Stay distracted by the kinks in my hair
the deep brown birthmark that creeps across my shoulder
patchy hair on my legs the razor missed
because surely I am not
Leaves crunching under my body
legs rooted deeply into the earth
Letters carved into my bark
I can’t read them
Hi! This is just going to be a super short review, but here it is!
I absolutely loved this poem. It is empowering, yet devastating and tragic, at the same time.
I love the imagery that you provided, and the way this flows in a... loose... yet still put together fashion.
I could really imagine this as a spoken word piece, one where the writer reads it with true emotion, because this poem is made for that.
Thanks for sharing with us, I loved reading this!
Hi BrokenHeartsAri here for a short review
So I would like to say I loved the imagery, it was incredible. I loved this poem, it made me feel like I was in a lucid dream.
Loved the last part the most
"Letters carved into my bark
I can't read them"
I absolutely love that part.
I agree with profile/YellowSweater The images you used was very rich and it has a lot of depth. I enjoyed reading this poem, I hope everyone else enjoys this as much as I did.
The imagery in this is incredible! I also actually really like your transitions. The poem kind of feels like a stream of consciousness of a lucid dreamer. The images you use are rich and textured and have lots of depth.
I have only one suggestion, the line: "A promise that your touch will leave you with a wound" Feels a bit wordy in comparison to the rest of the poem. I would suggest you find a way to more subtly imply the meaning, or re-arrange the sentence.
Again, wonderful poem, a delight to read and review! - YellowSweater
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