I like this poem. Both humorous and significant. Takes me back to when I was a kid in the fifth grade and used to daydream looking out the school-room window over the rubble from demolished building towards paradise-like Branchbrook Park.
Had the teacher who always pointed it out and called me dizzy D. Kids started calling me that as well. I like the stream of thought style that open a window into the speaker's inner sanctum.
Makes me imagine someone spouting philosophy or some other matter of deep concern for him while the one on the couch responds with "U huh! Yeah! Good! Good! Yep! Really? " and he is so engrossed with his fanatical blabber, that he doesn't even notice the disinterest!
Expressions that I particularly like were:
Let the wind from the fan whistle through my ears,
In one, out the other...
Absolutely hilarious! LOL!
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Riding on silver wings through a midnight sky
Adorned with thousands of suns;
Very elegant imagery!
Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to reading more of your work!
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