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I’ve already asked you too many times
But will you be my Valentine?
Chocolates seem fake to me
But I’ll give you more if you need
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Rejections are futile in my mind
I need you to be my Valentine
I need only you in my life
Can I please be yours, you’re already mine
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Over the years I’ve felt this attraction
At first it was small but now you’re a magnet
I can’t take my eyes off your beautiful face
I can’t concentrate, you take up this space
In my brain whenever we’re in the same room
All I’ve ever wanted were the words “I love you too”
But here I am, here you are
And somehow I’m still asking you
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I’ve already told you too many times
But you make me float to the sky
In my bedroom I break down and cry
‘Cause you still won’t look me in the eye
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I don’t want to seem clingy to you
I promised you that my words were true
It’s the fourteenth of February again
I wanna be more than any of your friends
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Over the years I’ve felt this attraction
At first it was small but now you’re a magnet
I can’t take my eyes off your beautiful face
I can’t concentrate, you take up this space
In my brain whenever we’re in the same room
All I’ve ever wanted were the words “I love you too”
But here I am, here you are
And somehow I’m still asking you
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I want this to work
You don’t understand how long
I have pined after you
You don’t understand how many
Mountains I’ve climbed for you
You don’t understand how many
I’ve left behind just for you
You don’t understand all the
Times I have paced in my room,
Wishing and dying and praying
For you to see me
As I see you
For you to love me
As I love you
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Over the years I’ve felt this attraction
At first it was small but now you’re a magnet
I can’t take my eyes off your beautiful face
I can’t concentrate, you take up this space
In my brain whenever we’re in the same room
All I’ve ever wanted were the words “I love you too”
But here I am, here you are
And somehow I’m still asking you
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Why am I still asking you?
This is my first review in ever on this site. I hope my review is something of help because i have no idea what to do at all. (please don't hurt me, i'm scared.)
I listened to your voice and I think you sound shaky, but I can't sing at all. Of course I can't sing, so I will just go into the song, but good voice.
"Chocolates seem fake to me
But I’ll give you more if you need"
(excuse me, don't attack chocolate like that.)
I don't think that line sounds too good because it doesn't work well with the other before. I am focusing on the last, the chocolate seemed a little childish, like it was one of those fake love kind of things, but the last changed up play. (i'm still salty over that diss to chocolate.)
I hope this did something|sparrow
Thank you for this! I know my voice doesn%u2019t sound the best here, and I%u2019ll think about how I could change those lines. I don%u2019t think chocolates are bad (I love chocolate), I%u2019ve just never found them to be a really genuine gift of romantic love. I dunno, just my opinion. 
Hey Lia! Here to give your lovely song a review
Oh, the pain of unrequited love. I think this song does a great job of summing it up with using Valentine's day as a theme throughout.
I listened to your singing as I read along with it, and you have such a lovely voice! I know you said there was no music in the background but I could imagine in my head what the music score behind the lyrics might sound like. I enjoyed your melodies and I think the melody you've got going for the chorus is catchy and strong! I can see this as a song that would easily get stuck in people's heads, and with love songs like this, especially ones that fall into the pop genre, that's exactly what you want!
Can I please be yours, you’re already mine
Over the years I’ve felt this attraction
At first it was small but now you’re a magnet
I can’t take my eyes off your beautiful face
I can’t concentrate, you take up this space
It’s the fourteenth of February again
I wanna be more than any of your friends
You don’t understand how many
Mountains I’ve climbed for you
You don’t understand how many
I’ve left behind just for you
Hey Lia,
I hope you are having a great day and my note finds you in great health. To be honest I hate love songs and I believe there is more to life than crappy songs about breakup and flirting. These pop artists like Taylor Swift and Katy Perry to name a few have further degraded my view of this category.
I had mixed feelings about this post, then I was like" you have clicked it anyways so let's head on with an open mind". Oh boy I was surprised! Those lyrics are so heartfelt and different. There is a hint of sarcasm and I really enjoyed them. You have really poured your heart out!
Don't get me started with the vocals, you really have the chops!
Man yoiu should write and sing more. You are better than these stupid "pop-stars", atleast I can feel the vulnerability and soul in your song.
I dont wanna sound cheesy or like an internet pervert, but I may have fallen in love with your voice. I dont think I can get that sweet and tender voice out of my mind any time soon!
I really liked the ending, where you were almost on the verge of breaking down.
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