If the sun is gold
And the moon is silver
Then what do you call the stars?
Can you really just call them white?
I'd expect a more shimmery, glimmery color
For something as hopeful and bright.
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Hi!
The simplicity and brevity of the poem provide for very easy-reading and a nice poem overall! Sometimes, shorter poems are the best poems, and that definitely applies in this case.
The rhyming is nice as well, with the "white" and "bright" rhyme (rhymes are always nice in poetry!)
This is a wholesome poem that provides a sense of hope in regards to the universe, describing the stars as "hopeful and bright".
Honestly, I have never really thought about the fact that the stars are just seen as white until I read this poem, and it has been interesting to think about, how something so magnificent is given such a plain color. So, thank you for opening my mind to that thought!
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I love the simplicity of the poem! It's sweet and simple, yet you manage to deliver a point/idea. There are so many things you can write about the stars. Their wonder is infinite. Thanks for sharing! ^_^
Hi! This is awesome. I feel your creativity is great.I feel this is logical as well. I feel this short, sweet and well written. I like that last line so much. If you expand this, it would be even more amazing.As a nature lover, I felt drawn towards the title and I loved this. I think this was worth sharing.
Would love to read more of your works!
From:Bhavya
This was really cute! It almost had the same vibe as the little rhyme "star light, star bright, first star I see tonight..." I think you have the choice to expand this, and to go into deeper imagery about what the color of stars really is. I love the little rhyme; it gives this work such a whimsical quality that I quite enjoy. Great job!
I apologize in advance for the really short review considering that it's a very short poem.
I think this is a really great and short poem. Very straightforward, straight to the point.
I love how you question the stars and the reader because it's like you are trying to get the reader's perspective on the topic. Though for the description, I think you could go into a little more detail as of what color the sun is, what color the moon is and more like, Identification?
Overall I love the poem!
This is a really short and sweet poem! It’s very straightforward and I like the contemplative voice of the narrator. Good job!
This is a really short and sweet poem! It’s very straightforward and I like the contemplative voice of the narrator. Good job!