It was a really good poem. I loved how you used the rhyme and rhythm scheme throughout the whole poem so as it was a very good use of the internal and external vowels. The assonance and consonance helped it move along really great. It sent the message across smoothly with your choice of diction. Although I do think that you should make the stanzas a bit more prominent. I think that the formatting of the poem should make the verses a little bit more prominent so that it gives it more emphasis each time the stanza begins again.
Points: 243
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