So hello yet again! Alright Joseph, here I am to get this poem out of the Green Room, on this lovely Review Day! I must warn you - this is definitely going to be a short review, but I will try to give some pointers on this. First off - thank you for the disclaimer on top; I was really thrown off by the format of this poem, but that little bit of information was definitely needed, which I'm guessing that you predicted, thus why you included it. I also really like the contrast between the disclaimer and the poem itself, how the poem was pushed all the way to the right-hand side. That's really cool! I wish you had included the syllable pattern as well, but I'm glad you at least talked about it below. I wasn't sure at first if there was a pattern, so thank you for the clarification!
Okay so I like this a lot. It's definitely way short, but this style seems really interesting, with the really unique way you can approach things. The language of this really fascinates me as well, but I'm definitely thrown off by "and voice" and "ere." Is "and" supposed to be "a" and is "ere" a shortened version of "there"? I just want to be sure on what I think I'm reading so I can be sure to try to interpret the meaning of such a short poem. Also, I thank you for the punctuation, but I think you could include a comma after "thousands" and "drum" to make it flow better, but it's definitely fine as it is!
All in all, I like this a lot. Your message is really up to interpretation which I appreciate, and it's definitely kind of needed since it's so short. Sometimes it's hard to throw an entire message on five lines, so I like having the ability to kind of choose what I think this is about. Overall, this is very impressive! I hope this review helped!
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