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by JohnKlue

The Nomad

A desert of indigo sand beneath a starlit sky.

Within the sea of sand they stroll dawning pure tunic and tattered cloak.

A creature of silent songs.

Wandering searching singing.

They roam They watch They laugh They cry.

Forever the shepherd across the sands.

They are Happy. They are Alive.

They are quiet and content.


Classic Story

“—And after years of suffering and turmoil

She was finally able to be honest with herself.

She didn’t feel safe in what was supposed to be her home.

She had let all her friends leave her behind.

And she had given herself to a man who never loved her.

And that’s how I met your father.”


Why do you listen to people who hate you?

Is it so you may Hate them back?



The desert had sand as white as snow.

The night sky over the desert was not like the sky anywhere else.

For this sky’s beauty came not just from the contrast of

Starlight before the darkness of a void.

The beauty of this sky was the compliments of a thousand colors dancing in the cosmos.

It was as if the Northern river of light had led me to an even greater ocean.

An ocean of the most beautiful fire in the sky.


The Mime

It is difficult for a Mime to feel happy

So the Mime helps others feel happy.



“I used to think people wouldn’t like me because I was different….

But that is the only reason they Do like me”

—A Clown.

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Thu Sep 02, 2021 10:49 pm
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Plume wrote a review...

Happy RevMo!! Plume here, with a review! I noticed your poems have been in the green room for quite a bit, so I figured I'd bump 'em out!!

Since you've got multiple works within this one, I figured I'd unpack them one by one. Here goes!

The Nomad

I quite liked all the description in this one! I think the flow of it was also really nice; the places where you put line breaks and such were perfect and served the piece rather than interrupted it. One of the lines that was striking to me was the simplistic but yet so beautiful "They are Happy. They are Alive." I think that there was a certain tone to those lines that seemed to say that those are really the only two things you need, and it was quite inspiring. I really enjoyed this work!!

A couple things, though: I think "dawning" in your second line should actually be "donning." And in your fourth and fifth lines where you list items, I think that some form of punctuation would be good there, especially since you use punctuation at other places in your poem. In terms of the fourth line, I think commas would work best, but since you repeat the subject in line five, I think that periods would be better there.

Classic Story

I thought this one presented a very interesting narrative. One thing I really enjoyed was how it ended with a question, and a poignant one at that. It really did make me think about it. One thing I did have trouble with understanding was how exactly the narrative flowed. I feel like I might have needed more context. It seemed like the "she" within the dialogue section was the same person who was the "I" at the end, but I wasn't sure who the listening was supposed to refer to. I feel like some clarification might be necessary. But still, great ending!!


Again, lovely imagery in this one. There were definitely a lot of gorgeous celestial references in it, and the juxtaposition with the content against the title was definitely very great. The meshing of several parts of nature served to really elevate this poem into something ethereal and light. It felt like a celebration of the world.

The Mime

This one might have been simple at first sight to me, but I feel like for this, there's probably a deeper meaning. Mimes always have to pretend and they can't talk, and when combined with the fact in your poem that they can't feel happy, Mimes, to me, seem to be people who have trouble vocalizing their emotions or pretend they're doing okay, even when they really aren't. They believe that they have to serve others, and they enjoy making others happy, even when it comes at the expense of their own emotional health. I might've read too much into that, but ah well. That's just my interpretation of it!!


I enjoyed this poem as well!! It definitely conveys a very important message. I also liked the vagueness of the title; readers aren't necessarily sure what to expect, but they come to the realization as the poem does. One thing I did wonder about was the addition of "-A Clown" at the end; I feel like that almost invalidates the thoughts provided in the poem. To me, a clown is usually synonymous with a foolish person, and I was curious about that choice.

One thing I do want to point out though was your capitalization of "do." I think if you wanted to emphasize it, putting the entire poem out of italics and then just using italics would be a more correct way to do it. To me, using capital letters to emphasize something doesn't really have the desired effect.

Overall: nice work! These poems were all unique and special in their own little way, and I hope to read more of your work in the future! Until next time!


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Hi there JohnKlue!

This is an interesting work. From what I understand, parables are usually stories with some allegorical meaning about life and society, and in this case the stories are being conveyed through free verse poetry.

I thought the poetic aspect made some of the parables seem more lyrical than narrative. For instance, ‘The Nomad’ and ‘Sandbox’ dedicate a lot of words to descriptions, which then convey how I think the reader is meant to understand the poem. The Nomad is described positively, and so the reader understands that it is good to be like to nomad.

Subject, Themes, Narrative

I don’t really see an overarching theme connecting all these parables together, so I’m assuming that they’re each a separate work of their own. They might fit into a very general and broad category of ‘life’, though. I interpreted ‘The Nomad’ as being about a live-in-the-moment way of living, ‘Classic Story’ is about troubled parentage and maybe saying it’s unreasonable to listen to someone who doesn’t like you. ‘Sandbox’, though it takes place in a desert like ‘The Nomad’ seems more about freedom and the natural beauty of the place. Meanwhile, ‘The Mime’ and ‘Realization’ seem to be portraits of specific figures or archetypes of people in society.

When reading ‘The Mime’, I was puzzled as to why it is difficult for a mime to be happy. It’s not really explained in the two lines of the parable, so I felt as though something was missing for me to comprehend it. Maybe an image in one of the lines or a third line might have helped set the context.

The most satisfying narratives I thought were the ones in ‘The Nomad’ and ‘Classic Story’. I thought these had the most ‘complete’ messages, which is what I’d expect from a parable. “They are quiet and content.” is a nice finishing line that gives a sense of closure, and the title also synchronises nicely with the verse. Meanwhile, ‘Classic Story’ is structured around a twist. It wasn’t entirely clear to me at first when the point of view had changed, but once I realised it, I found this one really interesting.

Why do you listen to people who hate you?
Is it so you may Hate them back?

It’s like the word “listening” introduces the topic of the parable, and one realises the first speaker was doing the exact opposite of that.

Language and Structure

There’s a large variety of structural and language devices across all the parables, so I’ll just address them, in short, one by one.

‘The Nomad’ – I liked the imagery in this one. The repetition of similar words like “wandering” and “roam” seems to emphasise the beauty of being a nomad, so I didn’t find it to be redundant or anything. I did wonder what a “pure” tunic would look like. Would that be a tunic that’s only one colour or material, or just one that looks very plain with no patterns? I’m not sure. Also “within” the sea of sand made me imagine really large sand dunes that almost seem to devour the nomad.

‘Classic Story’ – The most obvious device in this one is the change in point of view, that’s marked by the change from “she” being the dominant subject to “you”. I got the impression that the speech parts of this one was meant to be very angsty and tumultuous, maybe with undercurrents of resentment towards what happened to the woman to put “people who hate you” on the child’s behalf into context. I thought this worked for a lot of the lines, though “And that’s how I met your father” felt a bit anticlimactic somehow. After hearing “given herself to a man”, I think that “met” would be a bit of an understatement to their relationship, maybe? I think I would have also liked some context to this conversation – are the mother and child sitting in a room talking to each other, or is this happening over the phone, for instance.

‘Sandbox’ – I thought the title of this was interesting. The imagery of the poem seems very boundless and vast, for instance “ocean of the most beautiful fire in the sky” and yet the title is of a children’s plaything that keeps sand. It makes me wonder if there’s something ironic to it, like maybe the message is that a child’s imagination can create such boundless worlds even in the confinement of a sandbox.

‘Realization’ – I really liked how such a simple phrase, the “A Clown” as a signature at the end, can add so much to the meaning. Without the signature, I think the two lines might have been a bit hard to contextualise, but knowing these are the words of a ‘clown’ helped me relate the words to real life. Clowns, or people who work in entertainment, do kind of seem to sell their uniqueness, which is what I think this parable encapsulates.

That's all

Hopefully you found these comments helpful - and keep writing!


JohnKlue says...

A "Pure Tunic" is just a white Tunic. But a White tunic is not very poetic.

Thank you for the feedback.

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