Young Writers Society

I love it! I totally understood what you were feeling in this poem. I'm also christian, and this describes me so well. You really outdid yourself! I would love to read more of these poems. So I know I'm just going on now. Thanks so much for the read! I really appreciate it and everything!!!!! May you find a four-leaf clover!

-Laelle

I love this!!! This is so true for me, I have been wrestling with some things lately so this has been really helpful. I also really liked how you ended,
"But this fear of time is crippling, Indeed we need to talk." This is a really powerful ending, I can really see the Holy Spirit working through you with this poem.
The fourth stanza was a little bit confusing, maybe you could make it a little clearer?
Overall, this is a great poem, I really have no other critiques.
Keep writing!
mountainclimber

Hello!

I really love this poem! I, being a believer myself, can relate to this. God works through all of us, and perhaps this is the gift He has bestowed you: Writing. I feel I've been straying from the path quite a bit lately, and this has really spoke to me. Thank you so much. Maybe thats why I'm on here today... Yet another amazing thing God will do.

As far as critiquing goes, this is just a little hard to critique because I almost feel its already perfect. Though nothing, no matter how brilliant, can be perfect. I did find that in the 4th stanza (first line) you had forgotten to capitalize Heaven. I don't know if you technically have to capitalize it, but I always have, because its a place and places are typically capitalized.

Anyways, beautiful work! God bless you, and please tell me if you ever write another poem like this! I look forward to reading more of your works.

Oh wow!!!!! Inspiredravens!!!!Hats off to your work.Its nice and spiritual.Its all about a convo i mean conversation between you and the superpower God.it is the idea and imagination that God is calling you,I loved that idea.you should get applausions from me.i really appreciate your work

hello! here's my review.

first of all i want to tell you i enjoyed reading it.. i like the spiritual element because i am myself a believer of God. the first stanza is great, because i felt that it describes inner conflict and self doubt. and in the next stanza God knocks on your door and you realize you need to get back to what you were supposed to do.. it is inspiring.. the third stanza is realistic,. but the fourth stanza first line is a bit confusing for me as i couldn't guess what "they" is referred to? in the last stanza you overcome the worries and doubts.. the ending is beautiful.. waiting for more from you.. i liked it. great job. hope this helps.. thanks..
(forgive the grammar as English is not my first language)

I want to start off by saying that I love your poem. I suck at poetry and reading something this great really brings out a lot of respect from me. The rhyme scheme is amazing, the rhythm is amazing, and even the tone you've put into it. I don't want to talk a lot about myself but I have (somewhat) recently been drawn into my faith and for years I was rather distant from God and this poem really spoke to me personally as someone who is coming back into their faith. Again, congratulations on this outstanding piece of work.