Can you choose to choose?
Or are you choosing to choose to not choose?
Therefore defeating yourself in the first place.
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Stuggles come and go.
But for the sake of the feeling of victory,
We call them battles
for when you win
it can be one of the happiest decisions
you've ever made.
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But is it a decision?
Is it a choice?
Is depression truly a thought stealing,
mind eating,
good for nothing,
choice?
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When you can feel the sadness,
once defeated so long ago,
appearing like dark fog.
in the back of your mind.
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Its long, spindly fingers
grasping at your happy thoughts,
causing your laughter to fade faster than it should,
forcing that delicate smile
to burn in the pit of despair.
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I say
there is a choice.
For it is clear,
whatever bad cloaks your mind
must be fought.
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However ludicrous it may seem,
you have the choice to fight.
And although
it is the right choice to make,
what many choose
is a war never won.
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We fight and fight,
But it may never be enough
because everyday,
every hour,
someone succumbs.
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But we persist
because somewhere in our minds,
the happy thoughts still live on.
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Because every day,
someone wakes up.
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Someone lives on.
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Someone defeats the dark.
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Okay. Just to start off, I disagree very strongly with Transporter. No offense, but how can you laugh at something like this?? I honestly don't understand... I actually like the poem.
I'm not the best at reviewing poetry, but-- Wow. I felt the emotions that you have transmitted here. The message is true, and I think I'm going to show this to one of my friends. I don't believe it's cheesy at all, and I've honestly never read or seen anything with this exact same message. So Write On, and ignore Trolls! 
BTW, thanks for an EXCELLENT read!!
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Thank you, I found his comment odd, but there are always two sides to everything. I'm glad you can connect with it- that a great accomplishment for me
You're welcome!
OH And look through his reviews. He's just being hateful and mean. so don't believe it.
Thank you- I didn't realize that. That makes me feel so much better, is there a way to report him?
He already has, twice. If you would like to report him again, however, I'm sure that he will be taken seriously.
Hey,
It's been awhile sense I reviewed some poetry so bear with me here. I thought this was a very well written poem. I don't have very many complaints. In my opinion this poem has a very dark dramatic side to it but also a lighter more uplifting side interwoven through out it yet it never became overwhelming. So yeah, amazing structure there. This poem, at least for me is very easy to relate too and strikes me on a personal level that tends to be hard for people to capture. I admit I'm impressed. I think you displayed an amazing use of vocabulary through out this entire poem as well as punctuation and vocab. Admittedly I'm a little confused by the layout of the last two lines but that really my only complaint with this poem. Amazing job!
Sincerely,
Collideascope
Thanks
the last two lines didn't seem to work no matter how I tried it so I just threw it out there...
I'm sorry that is how you feel about it. I was trying to be artsy, not necessarily solve or create a problem. This was just a statement of my feelings at the time. I will strive to write better
Novel idea? What? LOL. You are really, really funny, Transporter. This just proves that you're spamming.