Young Writers Society

This is the first time that I see words that I have never heard of! Thank you for posting this poetry.

Hello!

This poem is absolutely incredible, and so creative??? Your rhymes are clever and provide a perfect fairytale feel for a poem such as this, and the jaunty rhythm provides a wonderful juxtaposition with the seriousness of the letter to make it absurd but oddly beautiful. The perspective of a father waiting for his son to return, combining Jack (candle stick guy) and other Jack (who fell down a hill), talking of Jack running away with the circus is all so clever and wonderful. This is seriously fantastic - I cannot emphasize this enough.

I do have one suggestion, which is that you could add a sign-off at the end to more closely follow the format of a letter. Otherwise - incredible! Fantastic! Brava!

Keep writing!!
Wayward

I think this poem is about a mother asking for her son to come back.Maybe he won’t,considering that his sister died.He might feel lonely.So maybe he really wants to avoid that place.Or maybe there isn’t really much to talk about.Maybe I shouldn’t read into it.But yeah,this was nice to read.I hope that you have a wonderful day and night!

Hello! Here to review!

I'm trying to think of the story behind this. 'You have not been quite the same' yet Jack has ran away. I see that as Jack's not the type of person to run away but it's that motherly way (I'm guessing it's the mother) of believing that they know their children inside and out. Jack is not there, yet she knows he's not the same.

Your Fathers worried - Your father's worried. (Father is not used as the name in this context)

I feel like the 'anyway' is a little too informal and ruins the tone of this piece.

I like the last line, there's a lot of barely contained emotion in it. The hope of 'if' mixed with the demand of 'do not slow.'

Overall, nice piece!