Hi there, Horisun
Lehmanf here with a short review. I hope it finds you well.
First Impressions
I loved this poem, the rhyme worked perfectly and the mix between adult and child. I myself did something similar recently with "10 Monkeys Jumping On The Bed".
Interpration
Riding Hood was very young
When her Granny was found dead
Ripped to shreds by a wolf
Her whole room stained in red
I can only imagine, Red Riding Hood walking through the forest, talking to the wolf. Getting to the cabin and seeing the state of the place, signs of a struggle and nice Mr Wolf towering above little old dead grandma. Would have been an interesting way to see the story played out if we had only just introduced the way wolves actually eat.
Better men are driven mad
But Little Red is bitter
Her cape drips with scarlet
And her eyes glint like silver
Revenge. A dish best served cold. Just like that sharp metal in her eyes. To be fair the original was pretty grim, a lot of stories are, just take it from the perspective of the villain. Her cape drips scarlett, well, she's already the girl in the red cape.
She swears on her very life
That there may come a day
Where every single wolf
Will sit in her display
Interesting. It always is when someone makes such a big promise and in real life, I'd not believe most people. Oh no. What in the world? She's going to stuff every wolf there is because of one, why does she sound like she'd fit well in an asylum? That is a little weird I guess.
So if they hear her coming
They better hurry, run and hide!
Close their eyes, rue the day
Riding Hoods Grandma died
I really the inclusion of "hurry" in the second line because it just gives the stanza so much more dimension. Close their eyes? Do you mean when they die? Or? Rue the day. I really like that as the ending.
Overall
I really loved this poem. It was amazing. I felt like every stanza worked well, flowed really nicely and rhymed in a really nice way.
Have a fantastic day
Lehmanf
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