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by Horisun


I collect books
Good and bad both
 Slowly accumulating 
Ever since my youth

Plenty people tell me
I should give some away
But those opinions
Hold very little sway

So maybe I'm proud
(And just a tad pretentious)
But who're you to judge
If I find books precious?

"Just go to the library"
Maybe I'd save some cents
But who are you to think
I have common sense?

One day I'll pass them down
When I'm dead and boney
But 'till I die, you best bet
These books? They'll stay with me


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Hello there Horisun!!

This is Eros here with a review for this beautiful poetry!

This topic is very unique and you chose it so wisely! I love the choice of words you have used, it describes everything so well!
The poem is about a bibliophile who loves books. And this concept is very cool. I love the format of the poem and the way you presented your thoughts is simply awesome.

I don't find any grammatical error or any other flawnas such. It's just tooo beautiful. Loved it so much.

Keep writing such awesome stuff,
And we would love to keep reading and reviewing them.

With love,
From Eros.
:D <3




Horisun says...


Thank you for the review! It's good to see you active on the site again :)



Eros says...


Haha yes xD



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Coming across this poem was very nice. I also found it rather funny considering I love hoarding books. I don't even do it on purpose. (most of the time anyway)

I like how the speaker doesn't want to get rid of any of his books. Once you have them why would you part from them. So what if you only read it once, its still there for reference. I also like how he mentions the next generation at the end like its an after thought. Its the best kind of excuse to hoard books.

Side Note: Can you even hoard books? At some point you're really cultivating a library.

Deep thoughts aside, I really liked this poem. You did a good job, keep it up!




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Hi there Horisun! Thanks for sharing this amusing poem. I had some thoughts on it, as I'll write down below.

I'm definitely of the camp that prefers not to hoard my books (or at least most of them) so it was interesting to see the ideas expressed in this poem. The speaker touches a bit of "passing down" the books towards the end of the poem, but it's a very short reference, so I don't take it as the main motivation for the speaker to hoard books. I interpret the poem as being about how sometimes you keep books just for the sake of it. The speaker only hints at potential outside reasonings, but for the most part they just seem to keep books because they like them, finding them "precious".

I think the rhyme scheme is a good fit for a light-hearted poem such as this one.

Plenty people tell me
I should give some away
But those opinions
Hold very little sway


I like this stanza in particular. I like that every two lines completes a thought. They are also uniform sections, if that makes sense. Like, lines 1 and 3 both give a subject ("plenty people" and "those opinions") and then the ensuing line for each gives the action or predicate for that subject ("tell me I should give some of my books away", "hold very little sway") so it feels like it all joins together in a logical flow. Of course, you can totally have a poem that doesn't use logical flow at all. This is just one way of looking at it.

But who're you to judge
If I find books precious?


I expected to see a few lines explaining why the 'you' can't judge the speaker for finding books precious after reading these lines. The next stanza seems to be going off on a different thought entirely, which is that the speaker doesn't have "common sense", thus defying the "you"'s expectations. But it doesn't really circle back to the idea of why the listener can't judge, so I felt like it was a bit of an abrupt cut-off there.

One day I'll pass them down
When I'm dead and boney
But 'till I die, you best bet
These books? They'll stay with me


"These books?" to me has an upward intonation. So when I read the line aloud, it sounds very different from every other line in the poem, which feels like a very abrupt thing to do when we're already at the end of the piece and expecting some closure. (And in general I think this poem isn't of the type that intends to have a cliffhanger ending, if that makes sense).

As for word choices, I think I liked "pretentious" and "precious" in the third stanza. The rhyming of these two feels very natural. The beginning of the stanza with "So" makes it feel like a confession to me, so it kind of endeared me to the speaker, as it seems like they're admitting that they're a little bit pretentious. That was a funny point of the poem. (Another rhyme that I liked was the one between 'away' and 'sway' in stanza 2. I can't quite explain why I liked it so much, but I did.)

Overall, this poem definitely has your signature on it, from what I remember reading your work in the past. It's direct, witty and rhyming. I could definitely see taking another direction to explain more of the speaker's thoughts on books and who exactly the poem is addressed to, but at the same time, the poem works well as it is.

Hope some of this helps, and feel free to ask for more feedback!
-Lim




Horisun says...


Thank you for the review! :D



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I feel like you have cameras that are filming me lol.I have a lot of books in my bookshelf.Once I’ve read a book,I won’t reread it.I’m told that it’s a waste and I should reread them but that’s taking away the point of books.I’m never getting rid of them.The library? What’s that? I never heard of it.(I’m joking btw) I hope you have a good day/night.





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