I...

by GrymmRipper

Published February 28, 2012

In poetry

I heard…
A pin that dropped onto the floor.
I saw…
A speckle of dust on my finger,
I tasted…
A bitter pill on my tongue.
I smelled,
The scent of sorrow,
I felt..
A hole in my heart.
I was...
Dying.
 
GrymmRipper :]
Comments & reviews · 3
IwillNOTbow2741 wrote a review Review · Jun 4, 2012

This is different than what I usually read in the poems I choose. It's really good, the way it flowed was fast but good.
Really good, keep writing!

harshita3chaarag wrote a review Review · Feb 29, 2012

Hey... This is really good... Really really good...and it flowed really nice..though of course I would have liked to read a bit more..But I feel that i's a good thing you kept it short..Well done!!
Harshita:)

Haha! Thank you! I'm glad you like it. :)

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neko commented Comment · Feb 28, 2012

wow....just wow
really good

Thank you very much! :D



fun fact i hear my evil twin once wrote a story about a hacker who used the name fyshi33k bc there are 33k-ish species of fish and she liked phishing so fyshi-33k made sense but then she got super embarrassed when someone forced her to explain
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