The Exodus
They eat the darkness, spread it with jelly
from Auschwitz, from Treblinka,
the lemon curd and marzipan that slumped in the
faults of bodies.
The photographs are fragile, fall apart in my fingers.
Ashes, skinned from the prints,
plummet to my Jewish feet. I feel a little German
on the inside, and fuel my flames with
the fragile photographs. They were wearing black
suits, inky. Their grins are like
clouds, and the smog from their lips paint
piles of children.
Their teeth are lizards, slithering on crimson meat
and slapping spiked tails into
bone. Their cleft chins and minute ears pierce
the French tan, the cultured cheeks.
I can feel the flames gurgle, sputter. Trembling
arms, blessing over this blesséd day:
Our wounds have stopped bleeding, yet our eyes glow
like a row of white corpses.
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this poem is burning with blazing, passionate, meaningful, heart touching words and lines. well, this is incredibly good.
Keep on with the Poems.
I have to agree with everyone else who's posted. Very passionate. I can tell you feel very strongly about this. Bravo.
Bravo! I am, myself, fascinated with the Holocaust. I really liked it.
That has to be my favorite stanza.
Very well done. Nice metaphors and topic. I also loved the word choice and imagery. The imagery really brought this peice to life.
To tell you the truth, I really didn't find anything wrong. Other than it being too short. Sorry, when something is really good and is too short (for my liking), I hate when it ends.
Bravo! I shall reward you with... a golden star.
Very passionate. I love it.
It could use some work but it is great.
Wow very nice poem, one thing though, the transition from the 2nd stanza to the 3rd stanza is abit odd. It's confusing, is it supposed to be a full stop, or a continuos sentance?
Wow. This has a lot of passion behind it. I did really see any major mistakes. I like that this is emotional.
Keep writing.
~Rachael