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My Rock

by DeliriumNervosa


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

Everybody needs a rock. Someone who not only remains stable and grounds them in times of anguish, despair and heartbreak; but someone who encourages, celebrates and enjoys your successes. These people offer a comfort few can offer us. The promise of not only tomorrow, but forever. The promise that they will never, ever leave your side. 

My rock embodies this in every way. 

People say that life long friends start in childhood. But I disagree. Yes, I do believe some people are fortunate enough to meet someone at a very young age, sometimes from birth, and remain friends their entire lives. However, I also believe that you can meet lifelong friends in all stages of your life. 

Our lives are more than just hours, days and years. They are memories, compiled like chapters in a tell-all novel. These chapters are carefully crafted through experiences, actions and emotions. You will meet a variety of people, some of which will just pass through. Others who will stick around. You could find a lifelong friend. 

I found a very special lifelong friend at a relatively young age; 8 or 9 I do believe. We both competed in the same sport. For a while, we would just engage in polite chit chat and small encouragements at competitions. But over time, we began to slowly develop and nurture a truly magical bond. We can go for lengthy periods of time without speaking, but when we do, it's like nothing has changed. I know that no matter where or how far away life takes me, she will always be there for me. 

People say soul mates are people of the opposite sex that you have a romantic entanglement with. I, on the other hand, believe soul mates can be best friends. People you couldn't imagine your life without. Those you know you can be brutally honest with and know, they will never leave. They will accept your truths and call you out on your bullshit. They will always take your side, after they have told you how stupid your being, just so when it all goes to shit you can't say "why didn't you warn me?!" The people you can talk to for hours and never run out of things to talk about. Or you sit together in a comforting silence, really taking in each others energies and presence. 

I am so grateful and humbled to have my rock in my life. She is the reason I am here. The reason I've got the life that I do. I know she will never understand the depth of my love and admiration for her. And that's ok. But I can only hope that one day, she sees exactly how amazing she is.  

- DeliriumNervosa


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Wow, another really deep message. I was expecting something totally different from the title. Once again, I hang my writing cap to this beautiful piece of art. Literature is a form of art, and I'll argue with anyone who says it's not. Keep doing what you do, Miss. I can't wait to read your next contemplative piece of art.






Hi Bluejay62619!
Thank you so much for that lovely response! I find it hard to write stories or poetry, but contemplative, emotional pieces I am quite good at hahah



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Hello! Wallflower here with a quick review (:

This was a lovely piece; it was incredibly personal and down-to-earth. Your fluctuating between telling the story of everyone and your own personal story was very well done.

Our lives are more than just hours, days and years. They are memories, compiled like chapters in a tell-all novel.


This is definitely my favourite quote. It creates such beautiful imagery, and it makes a wonderful point about the subject of friendships and the importance of relationships.

Overall, this was lovely! You might think about sending it to her :)

Keep writing!






Hi waywardxwallflower,
Thank you so much for that review :) I appreciate any feedback I receive :)
I am so glad you enjoyed it and it read well.
I actually sent it to her before I published it, she loved it.





Awe that's great mate!





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HarryHardy wrote a review...



Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Ahh, this was such a lovely read here. Its not too often you run into simple little pieces like this that address such a beautiful thing in life like this.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Everybody needs a rock. Someone who not only remains stable and grounds them in times of anguish, despair and heartbreak; but someone who encourages, celebrates and enjoys your successes. These people offer a comfort few can offer us. The promise of not only tomorrow, but forever. The promise that they will never, ever leave your side.

My rock embodies this in every way.


Hmm, this is a lovely start here to this particular title. It tells us the direction this piece is going in right from the start not to mention that's a pretty accurate description of the sort of person that you expect someone who's a rock to be. It paints quite a beautiful image in the reader's mind here.

People say that life long friends start in childhood. But I disagree. Yes, I do believe some people are fortunate enough to meet someone at a very young age, sometimes from birth, and remain friends their entire lives. However, I also believe that you can meet lifelong friends in all stages of your life.


Hmm, this is a little different to where this started off, its almost a little too quick of a transition, but I can see the direction that you're trying to go here and I think its a good one. Relating good strong friends to people who can be a rock to you seems like a natural direction to head in.

Our lives are more than just hours, days and years. They are memories, compiled like chapters in a tell-all novel. These chapters are carefully crafted through experiences, actions and emotions. You will meet a variety of people, some of which will just pass through. Others who will stick around. You could find a lifelong friend.


I believe this is perhaps slowly setting up the fact that rock talked about in this story is a life long friend and while that initial jump was a little on the shakier side of things, I think this continues in a wonderful direction here.

I found a very special lifelong friend at a relatively young age; 8 or 9 I do believe. We both competed in the same sport. For a while, we would just engage in polite chit chat and small encouragements at competitions. But over time, we began to slowly develop and nurture a truly magical bond. We can go for lengthy periods of time without speaking, but when we do, it's like nothing has changed. I know that no matter where or how far away life takes me, she will always be there for me.


Hmm, yes, its definitely shaping in that particular direction and I think this makes for a nice little short series of snapshot almost of a slowly developing friendship. It captures a beautiful bond that's slowly forming and I really like the feelings this is trying to create in the reader here.

People say soul mates are people of the opposite sex that you have a romantic entanglement with. I, on the other hand, believe soul mates can be best friends. People you couldn't imagine your life without. Those you know you can be brutally honest with and know, they will never leave. They will accept your truths and call you out on your bullshit. They will always take your side, after they have told you how stupid your being, just so when it all goes to shit you can't say "why didn't you warn me?!" The people you can talk to for hours and never run out of things to talk about. Or you sit together in a comforting silence, really taking in each others energies and presence.


Ahh, this is truly capturing the essence of what it means to have a really good friend, and being able to actually relate to this makes this a very powerful paragraph to read here. Its a very simply yet complex idea that you're bringing across here and I think you do a wonderful job of it.

I am so grateful and humbled to have my rock in my life. She is the reason I am here. The reason I've got the life that I do. I know she will never understand the depth of my love and admiration for her. And that's ok. But I can only hope that one day, she sees exactly how amazing she is.


Hmm, this ends off on a lightly bittersweet note that I didn't see coming. It looked to be wholesome the whole through and I think it is, only that there's a slight marring on this as the friend as the friend appears to perhaps not quite think as highly of herself as this person does of her. It creates an interesting aftertaste almost for this story here.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall, you've set out with a very simple goal here, and I think you achieve it quite well. Its just one of those things that leave you with a smile on your face. :D

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry






Hi Harry,

Thank you so much for your review! I appreciate every little bit I can get to improve my work. I am not a writer by trade, so this is more of a hobby/passion thing haha

I can definitely see how the jump is a little shaky between the two ideas. If you have any suggestions on how to make it flow a little better, I am all ears. I feel like it is missing something but I am not 100% sure what it is haha :)

I wanted it to have that slight bittersweet ending as it portrays reality. A lot of us don't see ourselves the way others do, that's the truth of it. So instead of using creative freedom, I chose to stick to the truth/reality. I hope it still read alright!



HarryHardy says...


You're Welcome!!

Hmm...good question. There doesn't seem to too much more you can do for that transition. Hmm, the best I can think of is perhaps a statement connecting a rock and a lifelong friend?

Oh I don't mind the bittersweet ending. A little touch of reality is never a bad thing :D





Honestly, this has been a surprise reaction and very humbling. I am very grateful for your feedback. Hmmm... That sounds like a good place to start! I will see what I can do.

Thank you once again!



HarryHardy says...


You're Welcome!! :D




But answer me this: how can a story end happily if there is no love?
— Kate DiCamillo, The Miraculous Journey of Edward Tulane