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Silence and Stillness

by DeliriumNervosa


There's something to be said for moments of stillness. Moments of silence. Not silence in the world around us, but within us. Even when we are still, the world keeps doing its' thing. 

Take the forest for example. It is always full of life, sounds and smells. Yet, we barely stop to notice. The soothing whisper of the wind through the trees. The bubble of a creek as water trickles into it from unknown sources. A chorus of birds, singing their songs. Not outdoing one another, but harmonising their individual sounds to create the most beautiful of songs. The warmth of the sun on our backs. And at the very precipice, a view, as clear as crystal, that stretches, undisturbed, as far as the eye can see. 

Each of these things creates an atmosphere that allows stillness and silence, but also doesn't interfere with the natural balance. It is humbling to see trees, plants and other vegetation that have seen so many things. They've seen and endured the terror of bushfires. The thirst that comes with drought. The new day that comes with rain, a fresh start. But also flood, the thing that was a saviour, turned into a threat. The strength of nature is astounding. 

There is a comfort in knowing these things. That even after thousands of years, through abundance and famine, the forest remains strong. 

We should aspire to be like these great, ancient Bunya Pines. To ground ourselves so solidly, nothing can shake us. Just as the forest weathers its' storms, let us too weather our storms. And if we fail or stumble? The forest will be here to ground us and remind us of the strength it holds. The strength we can possess if we choose to. 

I used to find stillness and silence scary. Intimidating. Now, I find it comforting, for I know, when I am still and silent; I experience and notice more than I ever do with acting or speaking. 

It sounds cliche' but when you finally understand,  and I mean really understand, the power of silence, well, it's life changing. 


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Wow, deep. That was a powerful message, and it really made me stop and think for a sec. I applaud the way you think, you should keep making these. I'm impressed.






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Wow, deep. That was a powerful message, and it really made me stop and think for a sec. I applaud the way you think, you should keep making these. I'm impressed.




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Hey! Forever here with a tiny review!!

This was a very strong piece we had here. I really liked all the beautiful imageries and descriptions you have used to convey the strongness of silence and stillness. I will just try to understand and interpret what you meant in the story.

There's something to be said for moments of stillness.

I found this line a bit confusing but I am assuming that it's the beginning saying that the author is going to talk on the moments of silence. I don't know why you used the passive voice(as it seems to me) here but you could simply write it as I should say something about the moments of silence or keeping with your voice, something should be said about the moments of silence if you want to keep the anonymous voice in the beginning and then switch to first person at the end. Both are valid, I think.
Even when we are still, the world keeps doing its' thing.

Just a little grammatical mistake- its' should be its

In the second paragraph, I think you tried to focus on the power of nature than the power of moments of silence. I don't know but it actually seemed to me that the narrator is very keenly observing the nature and specifically, the outside world and not the inside world. I mean obviously, the forest does a lot of things to provide us solace and peace but I do feel that the silence suddenly wipes off in the second paragraph. Maybe add something like inside, the person is still quiet and silent. I think that can also improve the flow a bit.

I really liked the third paragraph. I do wonder if you actually tried to show that the inner world can be influenced by the outer world, it more or less depends on the person present. Strength of nature is definitely a good theme we have got here to explore.

The nature shows us how to be strong and you have provided us with quite a few examples how the nature can influence us in a very positive way. I liked how the nature influenced the narrator and showed them the real nature of silence and stillness to such an extent that even probably changed their life.

Overall, it was a great one. The descriptions were so peaceful and marvelous. I do wonder if Nature can be incorporated in the title itself because nature had a great role in this story. Maybe Silence and Stillness of Nature.

Keep Writing!!

~Forever






Hi Forever,
Thank you for your review!

Yes, I agree. The beginning is not the strongest, I just couldn't figure out how to word what I wanted to say :p

I can see what you mean by the silence is wiped away in the second paragraph. My intention was to convey that even while hearing all the bustling in the forest, the character remained calm, still and silent inside, soaking up the sounds and experiences without disturbing them.... If that makes sense?

I do like the idea of adding Nature to the title. Thank you so much!



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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: The second of these rather reflective pieces that I've run into today and I think this does an even better job of just leaving you with some very interesting and most importantly a smile on your face.

Anyway let's get right to it,

There's something to be said for moments of stillness. Moments of silence. Not silence in the world around us, but within us. Even when we are still, the world keeps doing its' thing.

Take the forest for example. It is always full of life, sounds and smells. Yet, we barely stop to notice. The soothing whisper of the wind through the trees. The bubble of a creek as water trickles into it from unknown sources. A chorus of birds, singing their songs. Not outdoing one another, but harmonising their individual sounds to create the most beautiful of songs. The warmth of the sun on our backs. And at the very precipice, a view, as clear as crystal, that stretches, undisturbed, as far as the eye can see.


Oooh, this is a very interesting topic here. In the times that we live, moments of calm silence and stillness remain something of a rarity and as such this image you're trying to bring across here of how powerful and beautiful a moment of stillness and silence can truly be leaves a wonderful little impact on the reader as you stop to try and imagine this scene. The imagery you're using here is truly beautiful.

Each of these things creates an atmosphere that allows stillness and silence, but also doesn't interfere with the natural balance. It is humbling to see trees, plants and other vegetation that have seen so many things. They've seen and endured the terror of bushfires. The thirst that comes with drought. The new day that comes with rain, a fresh start. But also flood, the thing that was a saviour, turned into a threat. The strength of nature is astounding.

There is a comfort in knowing these things. That even after thousands of years, through abundance and famine, the forest remains strong.


Ahh, this is really touching on a lot of things I personally find rather calming here. Especially addressing the fact of forests like that enduring for centuries in silence, absorbing all the harm done to them as they remain strong over millennia. Its a powerful feeling that you create here, pointing out how nature manages to remain strong in its silence.

We should aspire to be like these great, ancient Bunya Pines. To ground ourselves so solidly, nothing can shake us. Just as the forest weathers its' storms, let us too weather our storms. And if we fail or stumble? The forest will be here to ground us and remind us of the strength it holds. The strength we can possess if we choose to.


Hmm, I was worried this may go off on a slight tangent on the note of the trees but I see here that you circle back to the main point quite nicely and tie in the perseverance of these trees back to our own selves and the topic you started off on. Its nicely done there.

I used to find stillness and silence scary. Intimidating. Now, I find it comforting, for I know, when I am still and silent; I experience and notice more than I ever do with acting or speaking.

It sounds cliche' but when you finally understand, and I mean really understand, the power of silence, well, it's life changing.


This is second story I find myself managing to relate to fairly strongly here, as someone that really enjoys staying up at night mostly for the silence it brings that the busy day just cannot. Silence truly does have a lot of power and you make a very strong case for it here.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall, we have ourselves a rather beautiful little scene being captured here and I really enjoyed reading through this here. Its yet another simple concept that's brought out in a more complex and nicely done form here.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry






Hi Harry,
Thank you for another wonderful review.
My aim is to create pieces that are not only personally important but are relatable to others. I am so glad you enjoyed it.

You are right, we don't stop and enjoy the world. We are so consumed by what's around us, we barely pay attention to what's inside. I wanted to show that the two are not isolated, they are partners. They work together to create a balance, a harmony.

If you enjoyed what you read, head over to my portfolio to look at some more . You mentioned you like the stillness of night earlier, I actually wrote a piece on the stars and the night sky. You might enjoy that!



HarryHardy says...


You're Welcome!! Oooh I just might do that :D




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