An Earthbound Lament

by DarkPrizm

Published May 12, 2016

E - Everyone

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Solid, firm, steadfast,
A chain.
Soar! Spread your wings and fly
An abyss of space
A fog that stretches earths
Free, disconnected and about
A silver change
In a world vastly different from our own
Inciting giants
Chain-less and defiant
The ropes that once held down
are no more
That is, for a time
A pause from reality
A vigil of purity
But still in the sight of what once held you
What seemed so small abounds view
Cities, towns, skyscrapers
Free but not home
The requiem of earth,
The land avast
This is the earthbound lament, free and free again
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modecker commented Comment · Mar 4, 2019

I love you

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Charlotte2
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Charlotte2 wrote a review Review · Jun 12, 2016

Hey! I saw the title of this poem and thought it sounded really good, so I came to read it. I think it conveys meaning well at the same time as being abstract, and abstract poetry is always good to read. I'm not sure exactly how I connect to this poem (I kinda see it as people being stuck to Earth, and not being able to explore - I don't know) but it's really good.

Well done!

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Kazumi wrote a review Review · May 13, 2016

Oh boy.

Another one of those one-line stanza freeverse poems. Please, don't use that kind of structure too much. It scatters relevant ideas and makes the poem harder to understand.

I don't know if it's just me, but I'm actually having a hard time reading this. Bear with me for a bit.

I'm not going to touch the meaning of the poem, or the supposed plot, since I don't really understand it. Maybe it's just me, maybe the way you present your plot is confusing.

However, this writing style is one that speaks of grandeur, and it resonates with the majesty of your poem. It actually makes me envious. Keep it up, anyway.

ah i see. i get your point but i just write it on how i view it in my mind so there are my thoughts, thanks for the review though :3

recklessandwild wrote a review Review · May 12, 2016

Hi! Recklessandwild here, leaving a quick review.

First, I really enjoyed this! I loved the language you used - it really contributed to the entire majestic-type feel I got from this entire poem. This is a piece I felt really peaceful after reading. Well done!

There's one part that confused me a bit. It might have just been a typo. On line five, you said

"A fog that stretches earths".

Did you mean to say "a fog that stretches the Earth"? It's not a big deal, I just wondered about it is all.

This poem is one that I am still deciphering the meaning of. I really enjoyed it. Good job, and keep on writing! I can't wait to see what else you come up with.

Regards, recklessandwild

Ah no thats not a typo, its supposed to symbolize how massive the fog is. IE: stretches earths- so its big. And thanks for the review :3



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