Sow the seed and let it simmer,
Growing senses, set the tinder
Boil the water, turn up the heat
To grow these feelings is quite the feat
Dampened thoughts and heightened feelings,
Hint at love, these infatuated dealings
Taller and taller, they're six feet high!
These feelings, these feelings! they're dealt with a tie
Take her to dinner, add spice to the water
In this much heat what could be hotter?
Your lost! Your lost! These seeds have grown
This garden? This garden? It's no longer your own
Flooded with feelings, no escape or out
Wait now, it;s not flooded with feelings, it's flooded with doubt
Mistakes were made, she's not the one
It's crashed and burned, was it honestly fun?
Reverted to seeds with water still settling
yes, this is learned, no more impatiently loving.
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hi there!
----marvelous! remarkable idea person!hmm so first there isnt much to crticize about our work as it is just perfect the way it is....but that dosent mean i cant even appreciate it and tell you about what i liked right?...
first thing first *claps wolf whistels* damn person... this was one piece of awesome work, i would say! i specially liked the fact that it was rhyming...
i seriously loved the flow of your work!
the title was also very catch...so yeah good job there! the theme was also supernice...so yeah that was a pro again for your work!
i like the way you start your poem
then again i like the way you end your work...duh what to say! basically all this leads to only one result and that is that...I LOVED YOUR WORK!
so yeah...great job again...hoping to see more of your works in the mere future!
~phangirl
I really like how you used a garden growing as a metaphor to love, it really had a good balance between the metaphors and what's actually happening to the character telling the story. The way you worded the poem added impact and some suspense as it went on and made me want to read the whole thing. The usage of a "hook" in the beginning was well used because you know what the poem is about by reading the title, but when you read the first line "Sow the seed and let it simmer" it makes you want to read more and know about the connection between love and this seed. I do not think I would make any changes to this poem, it was well worded and the metaphors made sense and were greatly used. I like how the sentences were switching back and forth every other sentence from love and the garden because it put a good balance between the two. Overall this was a very good poem so good job!