Young Writers Society

hi there!

hmm so first there isnt much to crticize about our work as it is just perfect the way it is....but that dosent mean i cant even appreciate it and tell you about what i liked right?...

first thing first *claps wolf whistels* damn person... this was one piece of awesome work, i would say! i specially liked the fact that it was rhyming...

i seriously loved the flow of your work!
the title was also very catch...so yeah good job there! the theme was also supernice...so yeah that was a pro again for your work!

i like the way you start your poem

Sow the seed and let it simmer,

Growing senses, set the tinder

I really like how you used a garden growing as a metaphor to love, it really had a good balance between the metaphors and what's actually happening to the character telling the story. The way you worded the poem added impact and some suspense as it went on and made me want to read the whole thing. The usage of a "hook" in the beginning was well used because you know what the poem is about by reading the title, but when you read the first line "Sow the seed and let it simmer" it makes you want to read more and know about the connection between love and this seed. I do not think I would make any changes to this poem, it was well worded and the metaphors made sense and were greatly used. I like how the sentences were switching back and forth every other sentence from love and the garden because it put a good balance between the two. Overall this was a very good poem so good job!