Kindness

You know, I truly love this poem of yours. It is most certainly beautiful and realistic.

Nice art. I love the kind nature of the gentle person who just rush here and there without giving it a second thought. II wish the world would have been as same as your poem. It's a human nature to be selfish all the time. i remember i had stopped my friend from helping a beggar as i felt that she was a fraud. But sometimes i realize she needed help and wished that i should have allowed my friend to help that beggar. It's good to help people but too much of something isn't good for help. It makes people dependent. I wish you all the best for your life and keep writing be generous to everyone. The world needs us.

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I didn't like the amount of "we" or the "we" in general in this poem. It gives off the wrong vibe like you're putting yourself higher or calling yourself more special with calling /yourself/ apart of the rare breed. The concept isn't bad, but the execution of the poem and the theme feels kind of convoluted by how it's told. It feels narcissistic in a sense, but I'm pretty sure that isn't how it was intended to be, even if it gives off the emotion or feeling of that.

The imagery you use is nice, but it feels like it could be improved or added to. My suggestion is to find some of the weaker and more general words and replace them with stronger synonyms. You don't/shouldn't really do this for /everything/, but it would help in moderation.

I think it would be beneficial for this poem to have punctuation or for the lines to be chopped up better. Read it aloud and sound it out to see if the poem flows well. The end of the poem has this problem with the awkward comma, and it feels like it would read better as a line if you took the comma out after blossoms.

The poem feels general and easy for someone to connect to, but there feels a distance between the speaker and you, the writer. This isn't always a bad thing, but it is something to point out that this poem feels like shallow water to step into instead of a whole lake.

That's all I really had to say, I hope this helped and have a great day!

Good afternoon/night, DarkPrizm! I've come to say that I'm impressed with your poem. Good job! It's solid, fascinating, and the central ideas are beautifully conveyed thanks to your vivid imagery. I find this distinctly relatable, given the number of amazingly kind people that I've met in my life and the friendships we've established. I know a few friends who moved to Tennessee a short while ago; though we've had disputes and arguments in the past, and they can be incredibly irritating at times, they've always been kind and courteous and respectful, even after particularly nasty incidents. I imagine that a lot of your audience can also relate to your main theme in a similar fashion, as such people might not be as rare as you imply. But, they are always treasured, and so your celebration of the kind and honest is something I admire. You even add on to this through your careful and well-thought out images and wording, such as the hands of thorns (which I found a rather unique scene, and an incredibly accurate and well-described one) and the willingness of these kinds of people to delve into sad or desperate situations and provide a kind hand, even if they're crushed in the process. The last lines, in particular, at the most powerful, but I appreciate your descriptions of their hearts and resilience. So, when it comes to the central theme and ideas of this story, as well as the details used to emphasize them, I'm impressed.

As for criticisms, there are a few things I'd like to point out. In general, I wouldn't advise capitalizing the first word of every line within your poem - that is a common strategy, of course, and I've done it countless times myself, but I found it makes the poem a little odd, especially when I break it down into individual trains of thought and sentences. I'd advise, in that case, capitalizing the first word of a line when it expresses such a train of thought, or even experiment and vary with your capitalization. This is poetry, and you can do a lot with it. Too, as BondGirl007 points out, your imagery is bright and vivid, but it also tends to suffer from being a little cliche or typical, although your expression of such imagery is refined. She explains it better than I do, though. Lastly, the rest is just nitpicking. As a rule, you generally want to read your poem aloud and see where you are naturally pausing, and provide appropriate punctuation marks. Personally, you could probably insert multiple periods in this poem to break apart individual sentences, as well as insert commas and dashes. For instance...

Us, you know the type

Too kind, too sweet, too caring

Hey there Prizm, Hope here to drop you a review!

So to begin with I'm no expert in poetry, these are just thoughts on how the poem makes me feel while I'm reading it.

So! I like the subject you chose; I feel people like this don't receive enough recognition. The people you meet in life who are going through tough times of their own but are willing to put that aside to comfort others are really something special. I find it easy for people to relate to because they're either like this themselves, or know someone who is.

I also like the imagery you use, although some of it is a bit cliche, but it adds life to the poem. On the subject of imagery, you have about half and half of showing us how these people are and telling us, but the two don't really tie together right now. The different imagery you use also doesn't really tie in to well. Like when you say "We've been stabbed and shot/but like a weed we grow back" even though I get what you're trying to convey but when you think of shooting and stabbing my first thought doesn't go to plants. You want your thoughts and images to flow together to build up to the main point of the poem. Right now I read it and it's just telling me what they're like, but I want to know why you're writing about them, what makes them special? I need more than just description on how these people are, I want a general idea to flow throughout the poem. I guess I could see it being "emotionally supportive people are resilient", but I need a little more than that.

You've kind of got this theme going with plants, maybe try and expand on that some more.

One thing that really stood out to me was the use of we throughout the poem. It kind of put me off because it feels like you're alienating the reader from the group of people you're describing.

Overall you've got a good start, it just needs some tweaking as with most first or second drafts. I really liked the last three lines by the way, and I feel like if it tied in with the rest of the poem a little more it would really add to the impact at the end.

Well I hope I helped some, even though my advice is a little convoluted, if you want me explain/ to go more in depth on anything I've said, just shoot me a PM and I'm happy to go over it some more!

Have an awesome day!
~Hope