Hi CreativeFreak!
This was a very good poem! It was well put together, and I liked the premise. It's something that seems to be discussed in our everyday world. However, I do agree that you should talk about other websites besides facebook. What about YWS? Youtube?
I really liked your first, fourth, and fifth stanzas, but your second and third stanzas seemed a little detached from the rest of the poem. They're very vague and I understand some parts of it, but I'd revise them and be a lot more specific so the flow is nice and smooth.
Overall, I really liked it. Most areas you were strong, including word choice and imagery. PM me if you have any questions or if you ever decide to post anything new.
-Elinor
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