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How I crave to hold him in my arms; to feel him, his touch, his heat, and his lips: so soft, so smooth, and so desirable. I bite my lip just thinking about it. To look into his gray- blue eyes is all I could ever wish for at this very moment. How I love him so, as he does for me as well. So much that he tells me secrets he doesn’t share with anyone else. He cares for me, worries for me when he feels I am emotional after telling me something saddening and scary, even though it hurts him more than it does myself. If only we could be together, but he and I are both to young, and he would never win my mothers approval, or God’s. But he is the only thing I desire and need in this time. My heart beats only for him.
They imagine themselves together, holding each other strongly; never wanting to let go for eternity. Walking across a vast field of grass and flowers, stopping only to look in each others eyes to finally plant one long kiss.
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He tells me secrets he would never share with anyone else.
Other than that, good job!
I notice it was posted under "other." Is this an actual dream you had? Just some random words you put down on paper? A prologue? A prosaic poem? A story about the guy you like?
Whatever it was, it was pretty good. Could be a little longer, for clarity