She left me weary and
I was torn with nor sliver or gold.
Match of the century what's the use. She's staring at me in my dreams saying or singing
refuse to lose, refuse to be defeated and refuse to have regrets cause you're not defeated.
All you gotta do is control your sunshine and it'll be alright, all right, righty then!
(chorus)
Swing her to the left,
Swing her to the board
You gotta swing that racket-swing it hard-
Hard for that Sliver and Gold
Sliver and Gold!!! Cause that racket is your talent and the player is you
all you gotta win them all! Sliver and Gold!
No way, not out of my mind,not going back this time and that's all right
cause I'm going to bask in sunshine a top of this cliff on a mountain top called life.
(chorus)
This mountain called life can be so green with evergreen trees so pristine and serene
but sometimes that mountain can avalanche or become a volcano- and you gotta slide on
down to a better mountain and you'll feel like you one sliver and gold. Sliver and Gold!
(chorus)
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Hello!
I'm Serenya.
I'm not sure what this is about maybe I'm missing something? Is it about losing? First you lose your girl, then you refer to defeat, and then silver and gold can be used as ranks or references to a specific title, you know.? But in a whole, disregarding the meaning behind it I find it to be rather good!
Hey
Overall I think the song was a bit vague, I think you could please readers a bit more wth better formatting.
I liked the flow of this song and am curious as to how it sounds. I was a bit confused about the meaning of some parts. I particularly liked the 'control your sunshines part, that was a nice idea