This is nice. I think it would be better off as a poem, as it's short and poetic. It would make a beautiful poem with some editing 
Either way, I like it!
Standing from afar, looking in a bar.
She is turned and I cannot earn a glance.
I do not even have a chance.
If I did, it would be in a place far from here, where they make stars into beer.
Not on Earth gazing at the stars all alone.
Why do I feel so alone?
Only the wind has to the time to spend and answer.
(I am not alone and the wind would moan. I am not alone and the wind would moan.)
I watch lovely dancers and I find that girl, and remember the wind’s answer.
In my dreams I am not alone, I am with her all the time.
Loving her should not be a crime.
(I am not alone and the wind would moan)
This is nice. I think it would be better off as a poem, as it's short and poetic. It would make a beautiful poem with some editing Either way, I like it!
I really like this, but it's so short! It says these are lyrics but I feel more like it's a poem, although I'm sure you have a tune etc for it. Could you make it a bit longer, maybe go into a bit more depth about who this girl is and how you feel about her?
Other than that, great job!
Hey!
I remember reviewing this the first time around months and months ago!!!! :L
Let me just say now it is in the Lyric catergory and shortened it makes a lot more sence and flows a lot better now bits seem to have been tweaked!
It's obvious you have talent, but must be exploited more!
Keep it up,
PM me for anything!
~Retro Disco666
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