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Threads Of Destiny:Echoes Of The Pendant Book Three-Snake's Venom Chapter Two-Four

CHAPTER TWO

Snake was upset that he had to go alone with people from the other Tribe. But he knew better than to argue further with Thorn. At dawn, he left Base and walked to the lake. It was a chilly morning. The ground shimmered with dew. When he arrived, the others were already there. “Hi Snake.” Dylan was there, and so was Raven. Another woman was also there, standing near the edge of the lake. She had beige hair and amber eyes. “This is Soren,” Dylan introduced. A girl was standing near Dylan, grabbing his arm tightly. A flash of recognition ran through Snake, but like it appeared, it disappeared just as quickly. The girl had blond hair and blue-green eyes. In a way, she looked a lot like Snake. Who is that? How come I felt familiar with her? “This is Milana,” Dylan said.

“Can we leave now?” Soren asked impatiently. “Sure,” Raven replied. “Let’s go!” They headed off in the direction of the mountains. Snake trailed behind the group, who were laughing and joking with each other. Snake felt so lonely and left out. I only know Dylan and Raven from this group, and I’m the only one who is from Cobra. He glared at Dylan. That is, the only one that hasn’t BETRAYED Cobra. “Dylan?” Snake glanced up to see Milana hugging him and gazing up at him. “I’m tired.”

“Why’d you bring a five-year old girl on this mission?” Snake couldn’t help but ask. “I’m SEVEN!” The girl yelled at Snake. “She begged to come. Saber couldn’t stop her,” Dylan replied. Milana hopped onto Dylan’s shoulders. He staggered, but regained his balance quickly. Snake sighed with annoyance and they kept walking. “Look! Water up ahead,” Raven said cheerfully after a while. They all took a short drink from the clear stream. It was getting dark. “We have to find shelter,” Soren grunted. “What about there?” Dylan pointed to a huge crevice. “I can check if it’s deep enough.” Dylan put Milana back on the ground and went inside. “We can fit inside. It leads to a cave,” Dylan said after climbing out. “Ok. I’ll go gather food,” Soren mumbled. She set off. Snake, Dylan, Raven, and Milana stayed. Dylan had found some firewood and had made a pretty decent fire.

“I’m back,” Soren said as she ducked under and walked inside the cave. The orange flames lit her face up with a glow. She had caught fish, berries, and other fruits. “Wow,” Raven said admirably. “Good job!” They ate together, then lay down to sleep on the cold stone floor. “I’ll never get used to this,” Milana complained, but then pressed close to Dylan. They seem to have a very close connection. Raven came closer to Dylan as well. Only Soren and Snake were a distance apart from the three.

I wonder what tomorrow will bring. I hope we get thyme soon. Thorn is getting weaker by the moment.

CHAPTER THREE

Snake blinked his eyes open. Sunlight was streaming through the crevice. He looked over at where Dylan, Raven, and Milana were still sleeping. Soren was gone though. She must’ve gone to gather food! He heard someone yawn from where the three were sleeping. Raven got up and stretched her arms over her head. “Good morning,” she said to Snake. “Wake up!” Raven said to Dylan and shook him. “Okay…just give me a second…” Dylan lay there, then sat up slowly. “What’s happening?”

“We’re leaving soon,” Snake grunted. “Oh, you lazypuffs are finally awake. I’ve been awake for HOURS!” Soren poked her head inside. “Let’s get moving!”

They continued on until they reached a cliff. “We’ll have to climb it. Milana, you go first,” Soren said. “Raven next, then Dylan, then Snake. I’ll go last.”

Milana carefully placed her hand in a rockhold. She soon got herself onto the rocky cliff. They all started climbing.

Snake soon realized he was falling behind. Soren had climbed ahead of him and warned him to be careful. I don’t like heights! Just don’t look down. Snake looked down. It was an extremely dangerous climb, and a tall cliff. “We’re halfway there!” Raven shouted below. Milana let out a scream and fell. Snake heard the rocks slide as Raven caught her. “You alright?” Soren yelled up. “We’re fine,” Raven yelled down as a reply. Soon they reached the top. Milana climbed onto the ledge and sprawled onto her back. Raven got up, Dylan got up, and Soren got up. He was the only one left. As he tried pulling himself up, his hand suddenly slipped and one of his feet lost grip. “AAH!” he screamed as he slipped. “Snake!” Dylan hissed. He hesitated, then took off his pendant. “Hold on to this!”

“No!” Snake snarled. “I can manage by myself!” But anyone could tell that this wasn’t the case. He gave up on trying to get a hold on the rocks and instead grabbed the end of the pendant. It snapped as Snake pulled himself up. Dylan took the pendant up before it could fall.

“Thanks…” Snake muttered, embarrassed. “It was nothing,” Dylan mumbled. He put the broken pendant into his pocket. They continued up the slope of the mountain.

“Excuse me, what are you doing on our territory?” Snake whipped around and saw a boy, around Dylan’s age, maybe older. He wore thick black armor and had brown eyes and light brown hair. “Who’s territory? Who even are you?” Soren demanded. “This is the Glacier Tribe’s territory! I’m Aidan,” the boy said. “What are you doing here?”

Snake was about to snarl at the boy when Dylan spoke first. “I’m sorry, Aidan, we didn’t mean to trespass. Our Tribes are sick, and we’ve heard the mountains have a herb called thyme.” Snake glared at him. Why does he always have to KEEP THE PEACE!? “I’ve never heard of other Tribes around here!” Aidan said, astonished. “We haven’t either,” Raven answered. “Now can we have some or not?”

“It is to be decided by Frost,” Aidan said tartly. “Follow me.” The group followed Aidan further up the mountain to a castle. It was mostly pale blue, with a few chunks of snow and ice scattered around it.

They arrived inside the castle. There was a woman seated on a throne made of ice. She had blue eyes and blond hair. “Hi Aidan,” she said. Snake guessed she was Frost, the leader of the Glacier Tribe. “Hi, Frost. I found this little group roaming around our territory. They claimed their Tribes were sick and they needed thyme.” Dylan knelt down. “No need to do that, dear,” Frost said, surprised. He stood back up. “We don’t mean to cause any trouble, Frost.” Dylan said. “What are your names?” Frost asked. She had a look of recognition on her face. “I’m Dylan, this is Snake, Milana, Raven, and Soren.” Dylan gestured to the group as he introduced them, one by one. Frost narrowed her eyes. “Where are you from?”

“We’re from the Eclipse and Cobra Tribes in the forest,” Snake replied.

“You know, you look shockingly familiar. So does Dylan and Milana."

CHAPTER FOUR

Tears began to fall from Frost’s ice blue eyes. She suddenly ran and hugged Snake. Then she did the same to Dylan and Milana. Snake was so surprised by the gesture that he stepped back from Frost. “What?” Dylan asked. For once, he agreed with Dylan. “Yea…what’s wrong? What’s happening?” Snake said, very confused. “Sit down. I’ll explain.”

Soon, Dylan, Snake, and Milana were seated in a room around a table. Frost had asked Raven and Soren to be shown their rooms. She insisted they all stay, at least until the next day. “It’s dangerous to be travelling alone in the mountains, you might freeze to death at night!” She had insisted. They all had reluctantly agreed. “Listen closely,” Frost started. “A few years ago, I got engaged to this young man called Malachite. He had black hair and green eyes. Just like your hair.” She nodded to Dylan. “We had four beautiful children. Two boys, two girls. But then, Vernos came after us. He was jealous of our relationship, and threatened to kill our children. We had to hide them. One in the North, one in the South, and one in the East. The youngest stayed with me, she wasn’t old enough to fend for herself. Vernos was furious. He killed Malachite.” Frost began to sob, but soon got control of herself. “I was furious. Vernos was eventually killed by one of my men.”

“Are you saying…” Dylan trailed off. We are brother and sister!? Snake finished in his head. That’s not possible! Dylan’s so unlike me, in looks and personality, and Milana…I barely know her!

“Yes,” Frost answered simply.

“Then…who’s our other sister?” Snake asked. “Dove? Come here for a moment,” Frost shouted. A few seconds later, a girl burst in. She had black hair and light blue eyes like Frost. Dylan’s eyes didn’t match anyone’s, which made sense since he had powers. “Dove, meet your brothers and sister!” Frost said cheerfully. Dove looked to be around five years old. “You’re so pretty!” Dove ran up to Dylan. “Oh! I love your eyes!” Dylan smiled. “Thanks!” Then, she ran up to Milana. “Ooo! Almost the same age as me, is my guess!” Dove beamed with glee. Milana’s smile lit up her face. “We’ll have lots of fun together!” Lastly, she approached Snake. “My oldest brother! Mother told me lots about you guys!” Snake couldn’t help but smile. Dove was sweet.

“I can’t believe it!” They were sitting in the dining room for dinner. Raven had a shocked look on her face. “Snake and Dylan? Impossible!”

“That’s what I thought!” Snake muttered. Dylan was avoiding eye contact with Snake, he could tell. This is crazy. Dylan looks nothing like me. Black hair, blue eyes compared to blond hair, green eyes.

Snake fell asleep thinking about the crazy events that happened that day.

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dragonight9
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Hi Cats! Back to review a few more chapters.


At dawn, he left Base and walked to the lake.
Great job capitalizing Base as it is the name of a place. However, I don't remember this place. Is it a place in Cobra? Perhaps the name of their capital? Or is it simply their 'home base'?

I love the description of the dew and crisp morning air. ;)

“This is Soren,” Dylan introduced. A girl was standing near Dylan, grabbing his arm tightly.
This line is a bit confusing since I wasn't sure if the one grabbing Dylan's arm was Soren or someone new. Easily remedied. Instead of saying "A girl was standing..." you could say "Another girl was standing..."

Their journey for the rest of chapter two is well described and helped me get to know the new characters without being overwhelmed by a lot going on. Great job with that.
I also noticed that Snake is alone when Thorn specifically told him to bring someone with him. I wonder how that is going to come into play later.

She soon got herself onto the rocky cliff. They all started climbing.

Snake soon realized he was falling behind.
It might just be because I'm more trained to notice it, but repeating lines can feel a bit off. Using 'soon' twice here is probably fine but I wanted to mention it because it stuck out to me.

What! Dylan used the pendant... and it Snapped! If it's the one I'm thinking of I'm surprised this isn't a bigger deal, or that Dylan would use it in such a way. But if the pendant needs to get broken for some plot later it makes enough sense.

The Glacial tribe's castle looks so cool! I wonder if Frost is immune to the cold, because sitting on a throne of ice (while a really cool visual) must be quite uncomfortable.

The end of Chapter three is a great teaser and set up for Chapter four.

The big reveal is great and you did a good job capturing all the character's reactions. Dove is a wonderfully innocent little sister.

I can see Dylan and the others getting along with Glacier and even allying with them but for Snake it will be a lot more complicated. Makes me excited for what happens next. There are so many ways this could go from here.

Overall, these three chapters progressed the story at a perfect pace that felt consistent and gave the characters time to react to what was going on. The descriptions were well done and the new characters didn't feel hollow or rushed.
Well done!

A little side note, I wonder if/when Dylan will tell Snake about what happened with Shadow since that seems like a potential breaking point in their relationship. If Snake liked Shadow then all the more so.

May blazing dragon-fire light your path and ignite the flames of your inspiration.

Thank for all ur thoughts and tips!! I rlly live ur reviews!!

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review · Wed Nov 26, 2025 10:50 am

Let’s head right in:

When he arrived, the others were already there.
“Hi Snake.”
Dylan was there, and so was Raven.

First of all, this is kinda how I would paragraph this. Also it would be nice to get an indicator who’s speaking. You could combine this with some kinda description of where the speaker is. F.e. “Hi Snake,” Dylan said, rising to his feet. Then some description of where he’s been sitting and with whom. That would get rid of the repetition of “there”.

Is the mission not very dangerous? I’m sure to protect the 7 yrs old, Saber would have tried a little harder?

Ch3 beginning is really good. Sets the mood! Now you could also describe just how the other three are lying and it would be perfect!

Starting to realize why Snake just jumped Dylan. It just seems to be his way of dealing with new people xd


Woah what a reveal! I’m surprised Frost immediately knew they were her children!

Glad u liked this one!!!

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AlexWrites
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Hello, CATS! Alex is back to reviewing to your work so sit back and enjoy reading the feedback.

Chapter 2

I'm guessing Soren is the name of the mysterious lady? I could be wrong though, as I don't remember the names of all the people in both the tribes, guess we'll see. (On reading a little further, I'm guessing she's just someone from tribe Eclipse who wasn't in the lead till now)
Tio to take here- The story could do with a little fewer characters. Don't get me wrong, I commend your effort for planning all this out but you must realise that the reader is going to have a hard time following if there's too many characters. In this story, we're not introduced to many side characters so it's difficult to keep a track of them. Like except for Soren, I only remember Griffith who gave Dylan CPR. Once you bring them in the spotlight, they become more easy to remember as I got to know Shadow after her story arc. So either shoe the side characters more to invoke a sense of familiarity to the reader or you can just do away with them if you don't really need them in the storyline significantly. Cutting loose ends, makes the work much more tidier for a reader to grasp and recalling becomes more efficient)

Ohmygod are Snake and Milana long lost siblings?!
That's such a big plot twist, even for you! I can't imagine what it might lead to..

“Why’d you bring a five-year old girl on this mission?” Snake couldn’t help but ask. “I’m SEVEN!”


I liked the mention of Milana's childliness here. She is a kid, afterall. She's stubborn as he makes everyone take her to the mountains as well. But as naive as she is, she instantly gets exhausted of the climb and uses the lap ticket to avoid labour, clever I must say! The frustration when Snake misaged her seemed so real, matching the reactions of many toddlers I've seen in reality. Good job keeping it relatable!

The camping bit was sweet, even if not rich in literature or plot. We also need such filling scenes though, for a break. The writing seems great so I have no suggestions as for now. I liked the last note of Snake's worry for Thorn. It shows there's more depth to his sikky character than meets the eye.

Chapter 3

Just don’t look down. Snake looked down.


This was unexpectedly funny. Rather stupid of you, Snake XD. He's got to be the most timid assasin of all time. Fearful of Thorn's scolding (she's sick bro what can he do at most), now heights- what's next, blood?

Dylan doing heroic things again, that's my protagonist. So kind of him to help Snake up. Also, quick thinking with offering the pendant chain as soon as his grip slipped. Fast reflexes, yet not too unrealistic.

Glacier Tribe.. see this was well executed as the boy Aidan is himself telling our lead group the identity of his tribe. In contrast, Raven just blurting out Serenity Realm in the previous book was ill placed. His hostile attitude was also seemed instrinsically natural, exactly how'd I'd expect him to react to a stranger in his tribe's territory. It reminds me how Thorn used to execute any newcomer in her territory and how Dylan was presented to Axel when he first set foot in Eclipse territory. Stepping in another tribe's territory is no joke and I like how the concept is consistent.

So Frost is the lady, that's a befitting name alright. But why does she recognise Milana, Dylan and Snake? Are they all her SECRET KIDS? :O Sorry I'm just out of ideas as I can't make anticipate what's going to happen next.

Chapter 4

NO FREAKING WAY MY HALF JOKING WAY TURNED OUT RIGHT
I also liked the story for why the kids needed to be hid, specially separated to make sure Vernos couldn't find and kill them. It would've been so difficult for a mother, but it was necessary to ensure their survival. Such a heartbreaking tale of reunion at last. Now the prologue makes so much more sense, Frost wanting to live together again.

Writingwise, I don't have much to add. It looked okay to me as it took the backseat to this mind-blowing revelation. I wonder where the story is headed next!

These chapters certainly caught me off guard with the plot twist. An engrossing read and I'm glad I could review it.

Regards
Alex



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