Arc!
I know this is a bit of an older poem, but I'm doing the Review Day Tasklist and I needed a poem I liked but didn't review, so here we are. So, jumping right in...
I think my broadest takeaway from this is just how much I love how you were able to write a sweet, lowkey emotional poem about such a silly topic to appease alliyah's chicken poetry needs xD. It was kind of soothing to read about the relationship between mother and chick and I think you did a nice job of choosing words to really drive those feelings home.
The one place that read a tiny bit off to me was between "where the cat may roam" and "cluck and scold" -- I really like the vibes we get from that, but when I first read this I was expecting more about the cat and it was a little jarring to flip back to it being about the hen, if that makes sense? Like, when I re-read it a few times the flow made more sense, but initially, and I'm not sure why, but I was kind of expecting a line about how dangerous it was because of the cat, or something, and it felt weird to jump back to the protective mother.
Otherwise, I literally can't find anything to critique. This was a lovely little poem with great imagery and a sweet theme and I highly enjoyed reading it!
Hope you're well friend!
~Shady
Also, I know I'm old, but the number of Schadenfreude and Fahrvergnügen that get used get tallied so here are my words, for the cause
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