Hey Arcticus!! Anne here for a review.Wow! This was a really great poem. It was a good read. Though if someone like me , who doesn't know the story of Yeshua, reads it, the reason why he returns will be a little vague. But it's probably only because I've not heard the story. So it's fine Now let's get into the details.THEMEThe message of this poem was intricate , introspective and a little bit suspenseful too. So I loved it. The words were very well chosen and the poem was well executed. GRAMMARI agree with Yoshi. But I don't have anything else to say. Also some verses were more appealing to me than the others.
where do you go first,when you arrive from that wildernessperhaps to your mother's doorto give her your peaceor to your friends: the fewand the treasured, or up a hill,with your flock
Wow! Nice poem! This is a pretty quiet and powerful, yet nondramatic, which is really cool!GrammaticalWas the capitalization of "for" in the first line on purpose, or was it an accident? If it was on purpose, that was cool! I think uncapitalizing it kind of shows how this poem is only describing the ending of an adventure, but there is still more before it.If it was on accident . . . well, you should probably capitalize the first letter in a sentence.
I wonder how the world lookswhen you've been gonefor longand then returnwith something that can't wait
where do you go first,when you arrive from that wildernessperhaps to your mother's doorto give her your peaceor to your friends: the few and the treasured, or up a hill, with your flock
I wonder how the world lookswhen you've gonefor so longand returnwith something that can't wait.
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