Hey TZH!
This was definitely a good poem. But of course it could use some improvements. Because even the best could be made better right?
Anyway I'm not gonna pick the nits ( I guess the others already did that for you and so I'm not gonna repeat it)
I'll just point out the things that I liked.
Well starting with the theme. It's not something that I haven't already read about but I still like it. You really did a good job in summoning everything up.
I also liked your word choices.
And the part where you said I'm no more a princess but a queen was outstanding. We'll mostly because I believe that whoever believes in themselves can definitely rule the world.
I loved the way you ended the poem. Though it is sad and everything but I still liked it. Because despite whatever we have and whomever we are with deep down in the heart we always think about "what if" or atleast I do.
Anyway I enjoyed reading your piece and hope to see more of your works.
Great job! Keep on writing!
Fangirl~
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