I really enjoy this. It's simple and short, right to the point. It's not over complicated with descriptive words that cloud the readers mind. You can tell exactly what is going on, especially with the short description you posted about the poem being about a one sided relationship. I think that the reader can very easily relate to the poem because of the fact that we have all been in love with someone who has not necessarily loved us back. The best line in the poem over all is definitely one of the final lines Where you have wormed you[r] way in, to map my bones with your heart was absolutely wonderful. I don't see any problems with this(especially because I don't do grammar or punctuation) and I'd love to read more of your work!
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