This is one of the three reviews that will be given to you be a Green Room Knight.
Truth be told, I'm not sure I understand the title. I mean, yes, you talk about people who are dying/dead, but the title is "The story of the grave"
The. Singular. And then you go off and talk in plural terms. So that's a little confusing, and therefore the title doesn't really fit.
The rhyme scheme is good, but on some lines it felt forced. And then the rhythm got thrown off because the rhyme felt forced. But, overall, it was a good rhyme.
I love your message in the last few lines, about how we shouldn't take life for granted. Great job squeezing that in! The general narrative was very good, and enjoyable to read.
All-in-all, I give this an A+. You did a wonderful job, and you are an excellent writer.
KT
Points: 16710
Reviews: 394
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