So, I have this novel, right? And I have GREAT reviews already, but you said that you tend to nitpick, which is something that I'm kind of hunting for because I feel like there are still things I need to clean up xD (the previous reviews weren't all that nitpicky except for my overuse of commas. Which I haven't actually fixed on-site yet, but: Commas have been taken care of in the document in itself)
There are quite a few chapters up, and I'll link you to the first one (the others are all in the sidebar), but it's totally up to you if you want to read the whole thing, or just the last chapter.
I’d heard he had started a fistfight in one of the seedier local taverns because someone had insisted on saying the word “utilize” instead of “use". — Patrick Rothfuss, A Wise Man's Fear