Hi ImaginativeAlice! Great start with your first poem!! Love the fact that you included a gif of a phoenix, that matches the theme of the poem perfectly :) I also really enjoyed the casual tone you establish with words like "wanna", it makes the reader feel like they know the speaker quite well and encourages them to take the poem's advice ^^ I think my favourite two lines from this poem would be "Your past is like a heavy baggage, / leave it, your life will seem lighter."
Keep it up, I hope the rest of your NaPo-ing goes well c:
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.
Alice you're doing a lovely job putting these poems together with just the right gif to add to the story! I'm finding the poems have such clear emotion coming across. One of my favorite ones is "Alice's Wonderland" since I think dreams are such a great poetic subject, and the different transitions as the speaker (and reader) tries to figure out what's going on is pretty interesting to follow! Also it looks like you hit your goal of 6-7 poems!! Well done! <3
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
We wandered the halls of an infinite magic nursing home, led by a hippo nurse with a torch. Really, just an ordinary night for the Kanes. — Rick Riordan, The Throne of Fire
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