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Mon May 28, 2012 9:35 am
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Due to circumstances and my extreme laziness, some reviews may be untimely.

The Chapter List is co-run by both ItallianIlluminist (Ita) and I to help keep rthe reviews flowing and the chapters read. Though, Ita's review style might not fit your desired style but will still greatly improve your work. He specialises in grammar and grammatical techniques.

Have you ever noticed how the first couple of chapters in your novel almost always get a decent supply of reviews, but later in your story, you find your chapters spending a lot of time in the no review pile? If so, then keep reading! The Chapter List is a review shop for all those unreviewed later chapters (I also do poetry). Just read the terms and conditions below and request away!

Here at the Chapter list, I will review just about anything as long it isn't on the black list, though I mainly review novel chapters and poetry. My reviewing style is rather flexible and I am more than happy to customize my review for you (see review styles). I prefer fantasy and action, though I do review romance and comedy. If you have any questions, feel free to post on my wall or PM me. Also, if you are unsatisfied with your review, I will surely give you a full refund and remove my review from your work.

Please don't request ongoing chapter reviews on more than one series at a time.

Review Styles:
Spoiler! :
Note: A summary review is a small review about a paragraph long explaining why I did or didn't like the piece.
1. The Writer's Grammar Check (Only for users who have been on YWS for less than 3 months.)
A summary review and an extensive spelling and grammar check.
2. Second Draft, Second Opinion
In this review, I treat the piece like my own and edit it as I would when creating a new draft. This review also contains a summary review.
3. YWS Critique Sandwich
An explnation can be found here.
4. Editors Pick
A calm, but useful review that picks out the best and the worst of the piece. This is usually 3 paragraphs or more in length and can also cover plot over the span of previous chapters.
5. The Lemon
A thorough and sometimes harsh review that is just like the fruit - sweet and pleasant when mixed with sugar, but it stings like all when when squeezed into the eyes.
6. The Slaughterhouse
In this review, your piece will be absolutely chewed to bits, and hopefully, come out a tasty, flavoursome steak at the end. This review is usually accompanied by many smileys to ease any pain.
7. The Custom Job
A completely custom review where you tell me what you want to know.

Constraints:
Spoiler! :
The Black List
What I won't review:
- Fanfiction
- Non-Fiction
- Horror
- Lyrics
- Scripts


The Amber List
What I might review:
- Short Stories
- Anything With Too Much Gore
- Anything in Other

Request Form:
Code: Select all
[b]Piece Name:[/b]
[b]Piece Type:[/b]
[b]Piece Genre:[/b]
[b]Ongoing Chapter Reviews:[/b]
Yes. [ ]
No. [ ]
[b]Chapter Links:[/b]
1.
2.
3.
(So on, and so forth)
[b]Review Style:[/b]
1. [ ]
2. [ ]
3. [ ]
4. [ ]
5. [ ]
6. [ ]
7. [ ] [Details: ]
[b]I have read and agree to the terms and conditions:[/b]
Yes. [ ]
No. [ ]


Terms and Conditions:
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1. I as noninjaspresent under any alias reserve the right to deny a request and withhold a review with or without a reason at your notification (either by PM, a post on your wall, or on this topic); 2. All reviews by noninjaspresent remain the sole physical and intellectual property of noninjaspresent; 3. By subscribing for an ongoing review of chapters, you agree to post valid links to your work in this topic and agree to notify me if you wish the reviews to stop or if you stop posting chapters for that work; 4. I reserve the right to remove all reviews if you fail to comply to condition 3; 5. By requesting my services you agree to have read these terms and conditions and agree to comply to them as so; 6. ItalianIlluminist reserves the same rights as noninjaspresent in this forum, and, by agreeing, you henceforth comply to any additional terms he may enforce for whatever reason, specified or not.

Requests:
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Stella and Luna Completed
Broken On Hold
Chapter 1 Completed
Chapter 2 Completed
Chapter 3 Completed
Eric Accepted
Chapter 1 Completed Ita
Subject 47 Accepted
Prologue Completed
Chapter 1 Completed
Chapter 2Completed
Chapter 3 Completed
The Fire Princess - Arinalgar Accepted
Sazerac Pending
Last edited by noninjaes on Sat Apr 11, 2015 11:30 am, edited 34 times in total.
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Stories Not Otherwise My Own

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Mon May 28, 2012 4:08 pm
Stellabeam says...



Spoiler! :
I hope I filled this out correctly :?

Piece Name: Stella and Luna
Piece Type:Poetry
Piece Genre:Friendship
Ongoing Chapter Reviews:
Yes. [ ]
No. [ x]
Chapter Links:
1.work.php?id=94493
2.
3.
(So on, and so forth)
Review Style:
1. [ ]
2. [ ]
3. [ ]
4. [ ]
5. [ ]
6. [x ] Be ruthless
7. [ ] [Details: ]
I have read and agree to the terms and conditions:
Yes. [x ]
No. [ ]

Thank you in advance!
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Tue May 29, 2012 7:22 am
noninjaes says...



Done. And sorry about the BBCode messing up in the review. My keyboard and computer both hate me. :)
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Tue May 29, 2012 7:57 am
HorriBliss says...



Don't mean to be rude, but you have no "condition 4" in the "Terms and Conditions". You mention breaking a condition 4 but it isn't labelled there as such.
I'll come back to this thread later for a real request form when I've started writing again :')
Good luck! :)
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Thu May 31, 2012 6:21 am
noninjaes says...



Thanks for that. It's edited. :)
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Fri Jun 01, 2012 8:00 pm
silverfin713 says...



Just wondering, is there a maximum length for any writing submited?
  





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Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:04 am
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No. I accept all lengths, especially multiple chapters in a novel.
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Sun Jun 03, 2012 1:23 am
noninjaes says...



^ Though I am a but iffy when it comes to short stories.
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Sun Jun 03, 2012 5:05 am
psudiname says...



name <Broken>

type <novel>

genre <drama/thriller

ongoing reviews <YES!>
links chapter 1: work.php?id=95420
chapter 2: work.php?id=95532
chapter 3: work.php?id=95705

style: <#5> (only for the first two chapters)
<#6> (I feel good about the third chapter. I want you to fix that. don't hold back.)

I have read and agree to all of the previously stated terms and conditions.
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if anyone wants a review, post on my profile and I'll get to it in a couple days.
  





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Mon Jun 04, 2012 8:02 am
noninjaes says...



I might not be able to get the reviews done 'till Monday because I just got loaded up with several assignments for school. :( But I shall get at least two done before Wednesday next week.
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Tue Jun 05, 2012 3:47 am
silverfin713 says...



Title: Eric
Type: Novel
Genre: Action/Adventure (although it won't seem that way from this chapter!)
Ongoing Reviews? Yes
Links:
Chapter 1: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95731
Style: The Lemon

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Wed Jun 06, 2012 10:08 pm
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Piece Name: Subject 47
Piece Type: Novel
Piece Genre: Science Fiction
Ongoing Chapter Reviews:
Yes. [x]
No. [ ]
Chapter Links:
1. work.php?id=95680
2. work.php?id=95686
3. work.php?id=95690
4. work.php?id=95772
5. work.php?id=95778
Review Style:
1. [ ]
2. [ ]
3. [ ]
4. [ ]
5. [ ]
6. [x] Be as harsh as you please.
7. [ ] [Details: ]
I have read and agree to the terms and conditions:
Yes. [x]
No. [ ]
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I'm losing my faith
I'm losing my grip...
  





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Thu Jun 07, 2012 12:02 am
noninjaes says...



I will do all accepted reviews as soon as I can, but there is a wait on all pending and newly requested reviews.
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Wed Jun 13, 2012 2:07 am
noninjaes says...



Send in all your pieces for the Review Callenge.
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Wed Jun 13, 2012 9:42 pm
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Piece Name:The Fire Princess - Arinalgar
Piece Type: Novel
Piece Genre:Fantasy/Medieval/Adventure/Action
Ongoing Chapter Reviews:
Yes. [x ]
No. [ ]
Chapter Links:
1.work.php?id=94517
2.work.php?id=94588
3.work.php?id=94589
4.work.php?id=94590
5.work.php?id=94806
6.work.php?id=95051
7.work.php?id=95648
8.work.php?id=95764

Review Style:
1. [ ]
2. [ ]
3. [ ]
4. [ ]
5. [ ]
6. [ ]
7. [ x] [Details: it would be helpful if i could get a further analysis on plot and characterisation rather than grammar, which i can sort out anytime. it is crucial that i at least get the plot right so i know how to continue. if it is possible, i would find it helpful if you could say what you like and dislike about the characters, and which are strong and weak so i can sort that out. also, if there is anything you find hard to understand then please mention it so i can iron it out. hope this isn't too specific for you, but anything along the lines of this is appreciated :D ]
I have read and agree to the terms and conditions:
Yes. [ x]
No. [ ]

i appreciate it may take a while, there is no rush! :)
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