Hi Pink, this is Fruit! I'm so happy to find someone who will gladly review FanFiction! So could you please review my 1st story? Pretty please? (xD)
Here is the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=54552; it 's called SSBB New Adventure Story FanFiction. It's based on the Super Smash Bros. Brawl (SSBB) game for Wii, so I would like to know if you could still understand the story even if you haven't heard of SSBB before.
Also, nit-picks are fine, and if you know about SSBB and its Adventure Mode, I want to know how you think I did on that aspect as well. Thank you in advance!
"We're all born with selfish desires, so we can all relate to those feelings in others. But kindness is something made individually by each person...so it's easy to misunderstand when others are trying to be kind to you." --Fruits Basket Book 1, page 134
Brief description of what has happened before: Isabella was in a car accident a few days later her boyfriend whose in a band breaks up with her. Jay, the boyfriend, has a cousin named Gary and that how Isabella met Jay. He is also in the band. He consoles Isabella cause theyre best friends and they slowly fall in love. He treats her to a weekend get away and gives her a promise ring to always love her. But now shes pregnant and she doesnt know what to do. whether to tell him or not.
Hey, could you please check out my story when you're not too busy, I know it's quite long but I'd love to hear what you think of it so far. Here are the links:
"Do you know what my heart says now? It says that I should forget about politics and be with you. No matter what. You're a true Queen, a Queen any King would kill for." - Prince Francis ♕
Hi *coco You've got a long list there so I can't promise you I'll finish it fast. But I will review them, just give me some time =] I'll continue to edit this post as I finish reviewing your chapters. Chapters One: *reviewed Two: *reviewed Three:*reviewed Four:*reviewed Five:*reviewed Six:*reviewed Seven:*reviewed
-meanwhile, I'll still be taking other reviews.
_____________________________ phew, finished.
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There are three rules for writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are. -W. Somerset Maugham
I have a story called Written in Blood! It's romance fiction (though the prologue doesn't exactly have love in it). I'd REALLY love it if you would review it. Here's the link --> topic55433.html
BTW, it's just the prologue, so it doesn't exactly tell you what the story is ACTUALLY about; it just kind of gives you a glimpse of the past. One day soon I'll get the first chapter up, though!
Thanks!!
Please forgive me if I over-edit anything of yours.
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