Free Reviews by Patricia [OPEN]

Hey everyone! So the bottom line is I need stuff to review, so if you have something that needs reviewing post it here!

Just a couple more things first though:

I will NOT review:

- Any fanfiction (just because I don't want to give a bad review just because I don't know everything about the subject.)
- Poetry (Including lyrics)

This is just because I don't know enough about this all to give a good or helpful review. So, I probably will take a stab at it if you ask me to, but it most likely won't be at all helpful.

I will review:

- Any type of prose (basically anything not mentioned above)

So that's about all I have to say. Anyone want to be first?

I posted this piece in several other threads a few weeks ago, but haven't heard back yet. I should just be patient and wait, but I saw your empty thread and couldn't resist.

You can read it here if you like, work.php?id=94743
Let me know what you think. It's fantasy-genre and my first attempt at writing fiction. Hoping to expand on it soon. (3000+ words, hope that's not too long for you.)

Hi, I just joined this site and was hoping for a review of a few captures of a fantasy book i started. It's called Welcome to Orba Nova. My friends who have read it like it but i doubt they will give me a true opinion to spare my feelings. If you don't mind, could you give me a review. Oh, i know my first chapter is a little dry but it picks up fast.
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Done and done. Sorry again for the wait!

Anyone want to be next?

Hey, I'm new here and have posted up the prologue to a story I'm working on. The book is called Dragon and it's something I really want to perfect and hopefully publish. It is only the prologue so it doesn't explain everything but if it gets a good response I will hopefully put up the first chapter. My friends who have read it say it is really good but I want someone who doesn't know me very well or the ideas I've had to read it and review it.
Here it is - work.php?id=95192

Could you review mine? It's called Return of the Gods #1: Artemis. I've only gotten one review and I want to know more people's opinions. I currently have the prologue, chapter 1, and chapter 2. Thank you so much!

Could you review mine too? It's the first chapter of my fantasy book (doesn't have a name yet) I'll review one of yours too
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95297

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If you could review this poem of mine it would be really helpful!
Thank you so much!

I'm finally caught up, and open for more requests. Keep 'em coming! (I should be able to review stuff quicker now, I only have two more days of classes - then I'm done high school forever! So I'll definitely need some more stuff to review!)

Hey PatriciaTina,

Thanks for the quick reply to my PM. Alright, I uploaded Ch.3 yesterday (in two parts), I would like to know what you think of it :

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It is very "dialogue heavy", so I'm worried there are some awkward parts that I probably didn't catch.

Also, here is Chapter 1 (in two parts):
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And Chapter 2:
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You said you wanted to read them for context (which is probably a good idea), but feel free to comment or review on them if you want to (totally up to you, I'm not requesting it because that might be too much).

OK, thanks in advance. And take as long as you need, there's no rush.

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I was very tired when I wrote this.

Would you mind reviewing the first chapter of my novel? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=95887
It's of the sci-fi/fantasy genre.

Please Review!


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