Reviews from a Marine (Re-opened)

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Oh, jeez, Jen, I'm so sorry. I totally didn't see your request. :? I'll do it today. :D
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Hey could you take a look at this please?




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Yus, okay, everything done. (As in Jenny's and Screamandshout's).

Anyone want a review? :pirate3:
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Hiya, Aqua, coco here! Remember me? :D

I've been kinda awol lately what with school and stuff, but I'm back in YWS world now. I've used the spare time that I now have in abundance to go back and completely revamp my whole story [well, when I say story I mean the 10 chapters that I already posted]. I'd be super dooper greatful if you could check out the changes I've made and give me your honest opinion on them. Take as long as you need though, no rush :)

Of Loss and Love: chapter 1 http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53716.html

Thanks a bunch!

*coco
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wouldnt mind a review thanks
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hopefully itll be in complete form when you review it. finally writing the end of the chapter




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Please review! I would greatly appreciate it!
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S.S. Rose
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Would you please review this poem for me? Thanks a million in advance!

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I would have risen from the ground.

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Hello! Please review this poem for me... topic69314.html

Thanks!
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Hey Marine, do something of mine? :D

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[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

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Okay!

I am bored of revision and not reviewing, so this baby is open again.

Please request so I don't look like a fool. Kthxbai.
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Hey dear, could you please review my poem for me? topic71564.html
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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Done! :D
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Could I please have a review? Link is here!
I spy!




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Done! :)
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Could you please review these three things if you have time?
Not many people are interested in Historical Fiction right now it would seem ;)
Thank you!

viewtopic.php?t=71409 Part 1
viewtopic.php?t=71712 Part 2
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