~Volant~

oh man, what well-woven action! You really have a knack for sentence rhythm. I could see everything so clearly. Often I just sorta skim through the action sequences of books ...

Oh man, this was so good! And something hard to think about. Where we are a character in our favourite fairytales, where we could be the wizards or the elves, ...

Hey, WGC! Nice piece! It's good to meet you! (Just a suggestion, I would change your description line to say "not me." "Not mine" makes it sound like it's not ...

This was awesome!! Very well written!! You have a really nice rhythm to your words and phrasing. You also have a real knack for writing description without disrupting the story ...

Hey, Flash! It's fun to start from the beginning! Beginings are hard, but I think you're doing good! I'm enjoying the concept a lot. I love that you told us ...

Weeee, that was a fun read! Thanks for sharing your story! I've absolutely fallen in love with your cast of characters. Fang is very memorable, and it's nice to have ...

Ooh, boy, was this fun! I don't know a ton about the story, as this is the first I've read of it. I'm going to start reading from the beginning ...

Well I"m liking how this is coming out!! Sounds like it's going to be a really fun story! ^^ A comment I had for the mother is, normally people in ...

(I don't know if you noticed, there's a place where the first several paragraphs get repeated in the middle?) Hi, Scorpion! It's good to meet you! ^^ I like the ...

Aw man, this was super cute!! Writing in the viewpoint of a child can be hard, and I think you've hit it spot on. Little touches like calling it the ...

Aw man, this was so cute and clever!! It was a lot of fun to read. ^^ I really enjoyed the fight scene, especially. You have good pacing with action. ...

Hello! Sorry, this took so long...I've been working on a billion deadlines, lol. One thing you should know about me as a writer and as an editor, I really pay ...

I really really really love The Host. But I know Stephenie Meyer is kind of frowned upon around here. As much as I can't stand Twilight, The Host is actually ...

Awww......how sad!! There's some real truth in there, though. It's an exaggeration I've seen on teh playground. I caught a butterfly once, and a bunch of friends told me to ...

Hey, Joe! The cold tile floor was hardly a substitute for the warm bed the young man preferred. As he lay there in the remains of the abandoned chapel, the ...