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This is really good! I had a great time reading it :) I'm honestly intrigued by the characters and the storyline and would love to read more. Your writing is ...

Yeah, this was pretty interesting. You seem to have a really good idea who your characters are and what they look like. And I've always been a fan of the ...

This is a really short chapter in my opinion and nothing really happens. This could probabably be taped together with the next part of your novel because on it's own ...

Hi there! I really impressed with this so far. I can tell you put a lot of time and thought into it :) I appreciate how you are keeping it ...

Yes, I agree that the dialogue is a bit unclear. I didn't really have an idea what Lucian was talking about on the phone in the first place, and then ...

This is definitely good. More than good, it's amazing! Probably one of the best things I've read on here in a while. I really appreciate how your prologue actually did ...

In the second line, I thought it should've said 'I held my breath as he fell...' not 'as he does'. It just felt a bit strange to me. " "You ...

Great opening paragraph! It really drew me in. "The others don't seem to be as satisfied with the weather though, our hair and clothes soaking wet. " I thought maybe ...

Very cool! I really like the idea of this story. I am definitely excited to read more. You managed to make this sound really epic without being over-the-top or confusing. ...

Hi :) I like this. You definitely have an imagination and a knack for writing. The dialogue was realistic, and I like that a lot. It was one of the ...

I like this revision much better! I thought the dialogue was more realistic in the beginning, where he is less lenient on letting Rebecca tag along. I also like the ...

Hi! I think this story has a lot of potential. I especially liked your character descriptions. I have a cool picture of Mina in my head and I'm confident that ...

Hi! The title caught my eye so I decided to give this a chance x) He pushes the gate’s doors open and rushes out into the plains full of incoming ...

Back for chap 3 :) "No" he says without any other words. "Why can’t I?" I ask back. "My road is a dangerous one. I'm not putting you in danger." ...

Wow, it kinda took me forever to get to part 2. Well, better late than never, right? :P I definitely liked it better than part one. There wasn't all the ...