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Death will always strike the important matter is, is your soul saved yet? -------------------------------- not that good of a poem. but true. very true. -ghost- speaking or believing something does ...

it is here, a tired opening line exploding outwards a tired, foppish consumption, lazy and spreading, like oil leaking from an engine block. is the "like" there really necessary? I ...

to me, this was all about religion. A lot of the parts were good, but I would argue that each section isn't really able to stand on it's own--though the ...

The sun was "brilliantly brilliant"? Brilliant. Really, though, try to actually think like the characters do, so they seem real and not just 2 dimensional. And just as general advice, ...

the one-sentence, one-line format is really killing the flow here, so perhaps work on loosening that up. Beyond that, work on being fresh and original in what you do. Don't ...

I have to say, I've read many poems very very similar to this. So, my advice to you is to experiment with emotions and wordplay--but mainly emotions. Don't worry about ...

I liked this the first time through, but after a couple reads, I've come to think it's hollow. Mildly interesting, yes, but hollow. With poetry as short as this, you ...

The language could be stronger, more emotive. And I don't think you used the ending to its full potential. And to be completely honest, it read a bit like prose. ...

This is different for you. And while different from different doesn't mean especially eccentric nor typical, it does mean that it was an interesting read. I was struck, in particular, ...

This reminded me of the book The Tale of Despereaux. Yes, I'm aware the book is written for 7 year olds. Shaddup :p. Anyway, all-in-all, this is a fun, simple ...

First off, read this: Now, what we have here is a nice little poem about stars and dancing through the sky and happy times. All is well, right? Wrong. You ...

Rhyming can add flair and fun to poetry, yes, but it is still a restriction. Here you are clearly bound by your decision to have a rhyme scheme, and that's ...

Just a note: while irregular linebreaks can add wonders to poetry, they can be equally devastating if ill-used. I love the fact that you're going against the grain and having ...

Livre * By Claudette Letters on a page, In between two thick covers of Various colors, glare at me, Reminding me that I must read. Eventually… *Livre is the French ...

A much, much better way to relate string instruments to sex than the others I've seen. So props on that. My main gripe was that you uses ellipses (...) in ...