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This is adorable and sweet :). My biggest problem was that I don't understand where songbirds really fit in, and you don't explain why songbirds are kings, let alone why ...

Alrighty, so I see you're new here, so first off I'd just like to say welcome, and this is an AMAZING poem for a first try :), and even for ...

This story makes a good preface to something, almost a sort of explanation why a teenager, or young-adult dragon may feel the way he does about his mother. However, it ...

Haha this is hilarious, I've seen a lot of short jokes like this before. I am a total Potterhead and admin on a few FB pages about it, so I ...

I really like this, it has a good flow and a good rhythm. Just to comment on the comment above, I don't thing "god" needs to be capitalized because you're ...

This was really good, and very visual. The emotions ever deep, and the punctuation was perfect! The only thing I noticed was that your language wasn't very.....Hmm, shall we say ...

Uhmmm, alright, great start. However there are some things I'd really like to point out: In a solace of black and white, Good start as long as you take this ...

I really liked this, and I can't see anything particularly major to critique you on. The only thing I could say is you could add a little more flavor to ...

Great poem, great meaning, although kind of a rip off of a few Journey songs......Either way, your biggest problem was punctuation and that's what I'm here to fix! S ome ...

Okay, so this was adorable :), and also very deep. Honestly, when I first read it the "THIS IS THE SONG THAT NEVER ENDS" song got stuck in my head.....Yupp, ...

This poem was really good, and I don't see much wrong with the punctuation either, which is one of the things I'm normally all over poets about. I'm not sure ...

Honestly, I don't understand this poem. I know there is a lot going on in your head here, and it may make perfect sense to you, but it's almost like ...

Okay so uhhhhmmm....Where to start. First off, while this piece isn't bad, it's a topic that is WAY over abused it's practically a cliche, and not a good one. Second, ...

This is gorgeous :). You did a great job, and it rings true with amazing patriotism. The punctuation however, is terrible. But that's what I'm here to try and fix ...

I loved this poem, and it's a WHOLE lot better than most of my stuff every turns out when I try to write it wide awake, let alone half asleep ...