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Hey KM, Good start for a story. I don't know if it could pass as a prologue, but if you keep writing and kind of explain the situation, it sounds ...

Wow, you had a good rhyme and rythym, and a good sense of humor. It had the classic "funny poem" style, but the part about Ol' Lucky was a little ...

This was really good, and really went along with the style of Star Wars. I loved the action, and the duel was awesome. The jedi was cool, but I think ...

Hey, I know you wrote this like a year ago, but I wanted to check it out anyway Like everyone said, I think Vader is a little to... impatient. If ...

I really liked this. The characters are belivable, as are you situations. It's a good opening chapter, and the way you captured everyone's attention with "IT" is great. Awesome descriptions! ...

Hey, this is pretty sweet. I liked it, and it really captured my imagination. It was a little vague, but I think that gives it character. Nice job, and keep ...

Hey G, I don't have time to critique this whole thing right now, but I'll give you some pointers. First, you definitely have some potential for writing. This piece was ...

Hey! Great work on this. It was very well structured and had a lot of good descriptions. The only things I saw that were wrong with it were mostly grammar. ...

Dang, you wrote that in math? Nice job. Umm, I think you did a very good job writing this.. although I'd hate to see you grade in math. :? I ...

Hey HorseFreak, I thought I'd crit your story. Okay, first the nitpics, but before I start, just remember that it's your story and just because someone tells you to change ...

Hey Horsez! First, I'll commend you for trying to improve your work. I haven't read the first version yet, but I'll crit this. As far as spelling and grammar go, ...

I loved the Eragon books!!! (Although the movie definitly didn't live up to the books). I think he probably meets a God because he's, like the most legendary of all ...

Hello! You reviewed my poem, so I thought I'd review one of yours. First, some nit piks. my ripped arms This is a pretty intense line. He loves me, he’s ...

First off, I want to say this is a great storyline. You really captured the character's personality. You have great detail and did a good job describing the setting. First ...

First off, it's an awesome thing that you are trying to write. You've got some real talent here. This is a good idea for a poem, though I think it ...