tigeraye

This is a good start, but I want a lot more. "Scattered far and wide" is actually very vague description and doesn't paint a vivid picture of this supposed wreckage ...

Not a bad effort. It's unhealthy to cut ourselves from people when we feel the massive amounts of pain this world has to offer, but sometimes we do it anyway. ...

You're trying to be airy, but the punctuation makes the poem more concrete. "Parisian" as a modifier for the vase is also not a clear image, because there's not that ...

Your use of emotion is great. It's very to easy to feel the anger that the characters are feeling, and the pain as this character's life comes to an end. ...

Hmm, excellent poem. Have you had or considered having your poetry professionally published? This writing is definitely the quality I could see being published in some sort of poetry book. ...

I enjoyed this poem. You keep it simple, but not every waking moment in our life needs to be needlessly and meticulously explicated. I think this poem is a good ...

I think your general idea here is fantastic, but the poem leaves me wanting a bit more. More specifically, I think you can do more with the line "They pierce ...

Something about this poem is off of me. I think it's because the speaker of the poem is suffering, yet the imagery is airy and light. When I think of ...

I enjoyed this poem. There are very few words and so it hits the reader very quickly, almost all at once, but powerfully so. The verb "live" to describe the ...

You have some fantastic lines in this poem, especially the entire second-to-last stanza. You also convey the speaker's frustration towards the cowardice of this other person quite well. What I'm ...

Your knowledge of the English language is astounding -- you've pulled from the dictionary a wide variety of powerful and touching words that not many people would be able to ...

This is a decent effort, if not a bit raw and unpolished. You have some nice worldly imagery, but it never really pushes past the sky. The sky is pretty ...

I adore the concept behind this story. Farming is not at all a relaxing, easy job, it's bone-shattering, back-snapping work. But while you capture the basic idea of what farming ...

I was a worker at the Swan Inn. The building is–was–nothing like what you must be picturing. It is lodged somewhere halfway between the outskirts and the real city, and ...

The nostalgic narration here is addictive. Despite the story’s length I found it difficult to quit reading. Early on, you allure the reader with an unsettling picture of Callie meeting ...