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When I say I have a difficult dad, My Mum purses and gives me a frown. She says to me “You’ll be sorry, When he’s not alive or around” But ...

Dear Mr. Publisher, I hope my plea isn’t in vain. Please find enclosed a manuscript, written in blue crayon. (Is the blue crayon random or something else? Honestly, I feel ...

You don't really have much puncuationg here... you may want to work on that. Personally, I suck at that myself but you may want to contact Jabberhut. She'll set you ...

I don't need to understand your poetyr. I HATE trying to decipher what someone else meant. I am far more content not giving my opinions on that if you don't ...

This is absolutely amazing. I would file it under "favorite soulful poetry" in my books. It's really creative and I was so into it from the very first beautifully written ...

Daydreams lead to heart break, (good opening) Unfulfilled wishes can only snap, (mm... the line doesnt really evoke anything in me. it feels... pointless.. and very forced. fake if u ...

This seemed likea TV add for some pills to me.. NO OFFENSE! Thats not bad.. However I felt some lines to be just plain... i dont know a word for ...

Hmm.. Funny. I thought about reading this as I saw it a few weeks ago but then changed my mind and now here I am again. What I really like ...

Overall; good piece. Although I feel like you could have made me visualize more. I felt.. a need for even more description for some reason. True, you do give a ...

Lots of word the typical reader may have to infer here of look up. That could become an issue, I'm just saying that publisher's themselves aren't exactly the brightest crayons ...

This is a fairly good piece. You had some reat words of visualization and did a good job at making me see your thoughts. However; I dislike when people automatically ...

First off, welcome to YWS! This is beautifully amazing! The visualization for me was through the roof but the emotion was as well! I loved the way you began; it ...

Overall... this is very good. However, I do feel that you focus so much on words here and being creative and impressing people with just fancy words that you forget ...

"the falls leafs (shoudnt it be leaves..?) flow in the breeze, another school year begins, another year of hope, wishing, praying, that someone would come and take me away, take ...

In the first line; you switch tense: I hug you But then you flinch And then you told (it should be tell) me It's all in present tense until you ...