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Re: it's all melted away.
Hey there! I'm Tennis, newly returned long-time YWS-er, after a two year hiatus. Poetry is my specialty, and the title of your piece intrigued me. Thus, allow the reviewing to ...
Nov 6, 2011 -
Re: The Complications of Living
Hey! First, I would like to say I'm happy to be back here at YWS after about a two or three year hiatus. The truth is, that I miss writing. ...
Nov 5, 2011 -
Re: Summer 08
I loved it ! Write more SOON !!!! (sarcasm) :xd: :elephant:
Mar 20, 2010 -
Re: The Demon Book
A boy found a book this book was a special creation In it was the story of the world And everyone's narrations The intro wasn't bad... but I would change ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: A maiden's woe
Come hither,oh ye prince charming where art thou lost? thy maiden fair awaits thy coming for thee,she misses most thy sweet face she longs to see in her hands a ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: Four Roses
Four roses grew in the hidden glade, Four roses, tall and bright, With velvet petals all adorned. Surrounded by a shining light. The first rose was purest white, rhyming is ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: it's just the small print
Wooooooooooot! Impressive piece of poetry. I really enjoyed it. Awesome imagery, and use of vocab. The only little thing was in a couple of spots, the flow of the poem ...
Dec 29, 2009 -
Re: The Sharpest Blade
Hi, I'm tennis! Okay, so to start off... the hook was ineffective. In fact, the first stanza was counter-productive. It bored me as a reader due to the lack of ...
Dec 29, 2009 -
Re: rebirth
Ohhh, I liked this! I really did. I wish I could write this way :( I recoiled. I wouldn't use the word recoiled in this instance. You already bombard the ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Remembering her
Hello! I'm tennis. Here is your review: The loneliness sings a lullaby to me,One that cannot induce any sleep, felt like there should have been a period after induce. It ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Mom
Very sweet of you to write to your mom. When I have a son, I hope he loves writing just as much as I do. You're great (: I'm tennis, ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: 7-9-09 Dreams
Short but sad :( I could make that emotional connection to the piece... By the slick surface of the pond. I wouldn't have used the word slick here..don't think it ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: My poem - "A Gift From Me To I"
Hey, I'm Tennis!! Welcome to YWS! Oh boy, I remember the first day I signed up... good times, good times. I hope you enjoy our community, enhance your writing experience, ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Colourblind
Talk about an impressive ending! Sheesh, I was overwhelmed. Very intricate title, indeed. For the most part, I thought this was fabulous. It's a style of poetry I don't think ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: lost in thought
I stare at the wall but my mind wonders into the depths of my thoughts, line sounded awkward to me. Try cutting it up a bit, often works well with ...
Dec 28, 2009
