Okay so the beginning I found was kind of boring, which is not a good thing. The beginning is one of the most important parts, it's what draws your reader in, and this just didn't do it for me. As said before me, it's not always necessary to rhyme, in fact a lot of the time, when you try to force poetry to rhyme it sounds way worse then if you didn't. Like this-
I really really liked the first two lines, but then you tried to make it rhyme and it just make me go ehh. It ruined it. Try not to limit yourself with rhymes okay?Time trips on cobblestones,
a horse’s rough trail.
Its sluggish trot taking
that of only a male
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