Wooooooooooot!
Impressive piece of poetry. I really enjoyed it.
Awesome imagery, and use of vocab.
The only little thing was in a couple of spots, the flow of the poem was interrupted by a line or two, and it the rhythm fumbled.
For example:
and the bubbles began to pop! pop! pop! on my lungs again,
Other than that, no problems for me.
Great work!
8.5/10
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