thestorygirl

Interesting. It was captivating, but the format was weird. You should have separated it into stanzas. human beings, as a general rule, have bones. those bones tend to get lost ...

Wow. Your rhyming sounded completely natural; not forced or odd sounding. An invisible glow ignites an entire room Through a smile illuminating with gifts As it opens for those in ...

How should I word this. It's not bad, there is proper grammar and I liked your choice of words, but none of this excites me. Like MeanMrMustard said, it's cliched. ...

This is completely amazing and hilarious. I think it's written pretty well too. Here is an issues that I think would make more sense. No , I won't live that ...

I love this piece, but I think Jasmine covered all of the issues (awwwww I wanted to fancy reveiw this.) So I just think that this is a lovely poem ...

Personally all of this was hillarious, but I really loved this part. Paris: YOU! Out of all the people I could meet at this holy place the least likely has ...

I could not love her more than I did at that point. I pushed her yellow hair behind her ear. She dipper her head; half smiling, half blushing. She was ...

That was beautiful! I like Twilight, but Edward is played up. Totally played up in the books. This is definetally what should've happened A table for two?” Edward said in ...

I’m not short. (I’m not tall.) I’m not a fighter. (I’m not a lover.) I’m not weak. (I’m not strong.) I’m not good. (I’m not evil.) I’m not exactly sad. ...

Interesting. Definetly well written, but sort of confusing. You could have added more detail. Yes, there was a lot of similes. It did help with my veiwing of what you ...

This is definettly something you don't see often. But you should have added stanzas. It is easier on the eyes. The sun suffocates me and the still water crushes, as ...

It's very good but one thing. I walked along a cold lit night, Brushing slowly against green cracked life. My heart beat against the Moon, And the Sun showed his ...

I really enjoyed but just one thing. The tears are well hidden behind my eyes, a smile is forever stained on my face. But something hides in the dark of ...

Well isn't that just relatable. If this is how you feel a lot, I'm with you sister. I don't really have anything to say but there is a few things ...

What else can I say? This was fabulous. Every stanza just poured a story. Unlike a lot of the other people here I thought there was a lot of emotion. ...