thealmightypencil

Hello, I'm thealmightypencil and I'm going to review your first chapter. I'm going to tell you up front that I do have criticism, but I truly believe that your story ...

Hello! I really enjoyed your poem! It is humorous and well written. I think the phrase "tony destructive hands" is equally adorable and a terrifying. I also love the phrase ...

Hello there! Number one, I loved this story, and I will discuss why I adore it at the end of my review. First, I will start with nit picks and ...

Hello there! I thought this poem is powerful because it is simple. I really felt the frustration, disappointment, and nearly flippant tone of the speaker. The last five lines are ...

Okay, let's get the nitpicks and edits out of the way first! There are a few, but don't worry because I really liked your piece! I hope my comments can ...

Hello! I'm thealmighty pencil, and I thought I would leave you a review. First off, your concept is super cool. A lot of people write about death, and a lot ...

Hello, I'm thealmightypencil, and I'm just leaving a review here. Let's start with the good. I enjoyed your story very much. I found it very poetic and moving. I think ...

This is such a sweet, little story! I think it would be a wonderful story book with pictures and whatnot. You already have a lot of the elements of a ...

This is so simple, but carries so much weight! I like how you build the "Just don't look back." I thought it created good suspense. Another line I really liked ...

This piece is a little disorienting and confusing, but I can your character is intoxicated. If that confusion was what you were going for, then good job. I like this ...

Hi there! So first off, I really did like your story. You are right, you don't ever see clown girls! You're style conveys the narrator's emotions and thoughts really well. ...

The emotion of the narrator really comes through your writing. It is like you're only reading one half of the story and it leaves a lot to be filled in ...

Wow, your writing has very stunning imagery. The contrast in the first paragraph sets up your purgatory comparison well. One suggestion, break up that first sentence. It's a beautiful one, ...

Your work is very descriptive and you created some beautiful images in this piece. My favorite was "the playful diamond glimmer in his eyes dulls to a look of tarnished ...