thanatosdeath

was good, but I didn't quite grasp what you're getting at...Terror? Sadness? What? PM when it's more understandable maybe? Death

Great tale, and rhyming! I must say I'm impressed, maybe you'll make it big time in the big leagues of the world! Death

Sad...Not that that's a bad thing! Ilike negativity and such things like this...*Sigh*...Now you have much puntuation errors so you'll need to work on that...But I like your approach at ...

I see you're trying different ideas...That's good, I like the other version better offense...So...Like always work hard and you achieve great things... Chat later! Death

Grrrr. Stop rushing , Girl!!! Concentrate on one thing fist then move on! Make sure everyhting fits too!!! Don't keep posting random things! Remember to work hard, and check it! ...

I really think you need to workon this! HOnestly we don't want you copying others !!! Sounds like you're using the Disney Hades and stuff..You know...Vortex of Fire? Work! Don't ...

Spelling in some places need work, that or wording...I liked how you described things and such...Overall: Awesome! Still needs work though... Heh, I like silver and spiders... Death

*Is agreeing with everyone else*...Don't get me wrong, poem idea: great...The way you put it...Culd use some work...Overall: good Death

Great play of words, could be spaced though (just my opinion), I couldn't read very clearly...Overall it was good... Great desciption too! Death

Punctuation is a little messy, but this was well put...Erm...Repittion usually doesn't fit, but it worked for this piece... Death

Rhymes well, and the last lines were well put...Erm...I guess that's all I have to say... Death

I'd say a nice play of words...Dramatic is all over this...Well that was stupid...Otherwise why would it be in here?...All mistakes I caught and suggestions have been made by others... ...

...Nice humor...Not my type of poem, but it was still good. I showed it to my friends and they laughed wildly...Heh...Heh, heh...Erm... Death

Sheesh. So many negative vibes in these poems...Heh, I wish I found this place sooner. Anyways I loved how you played the words, I didn't catch much mistakes, probably cause ...

Ah, yes. Purple, a color of beauty and of the reasons I'm goth..*snicker*. I luuuurved it!!! Any mistakes I didn't catch actually, so maybe they were covered by everyone else...Hopefully... ...