tgirly

I like the title Angel because if it was anything different, the story wouldn't make any sense. If it wasn't Angel, then you'd think that she was just taking credit ...

You should break the lines up into smaller lines so it'll flow better. I liked it, though, in my opinion, it may have been a little repetitive. You should do ...

It says: My anger portrayed, My feelings hidden away. But isn't anger a feeling? It seems to be contradicting. I really liked the poem though. My favorite lines are "Words ...

I feel like the poem didn't really have any flow, and was just a long list of words. Wow, that sounds harsher than I meant it to. They're very good ...

You should put it into novel mode so it's easier to read. I'm not sure that "eerie" is spelled right. "As he pulled on a black cloak and grabbed a ...

That's a really tough writing promp, but you did a good job with it. My only criticism is there's not enough about being in Fairyland, since that's part of the ...

This was a very original piece I liked that you could interpret the piece in different ways; siding with the man or against him. I also thought it was nice ...

Really creative poem, i think I liked the word choice in it the most, really some interesting ones in there! Also I enjoyed the style of it with actual dialogue ...

You should probably break the first line into to lines for better flow of the piece and maybe instean of black, white, and gray you could put monotones, or monochromatic. ...

WOW! I love it! Is Lucy real? Don't answer that. There were some grammatical errors that you should probably fix. I once read that a way to edit your work ...

mother's picture, not mothers picture. she knew, not see knew. There should be period after He opened the door not a comma. There should be a comma between the voice ...

"As I fell asleep everything felt slow motion" doesn't make sense. Also, how'd she find herself sitting ON her brother's room? He was stille having trouble getting used TO them. ...

You should probably break the first sentence in paragraph 3 up into more sentences. Also, the second-to-last paragraph before the first cross things is confusing. Sean decided he would take ...

It started out slow, just talking about the sky, I began to wonder if it would be a story. But it is written very well, so even if it didn't ...

Unlike OUR sheltered selves... if you're going to capitalize Day, maybe you should capitalize night too. Sorry if I seem harsh, just want to say it before I forget, and ...